- Oh, as to that homonym problem I mentioned, “Holy shit, I aren’t never scene anything like that before,” should be “Holy shit, I aren’t never seen anything like that before,”
Author's responseThanks No matter how many times I read this through that one slipped by me.
- Love how you have started it so far. Keep up the good work. HPHR has always been my favorite ship. Maybe it is because I can't stand flippant and shallow girls.
Smart women all the way.
Couple things to improve though. First is the lack of questions being asked. Starting from Harry accepting the guy from Gringotts. Next the gang not asking how or where the sword came from. And then the snake.
Just some things that did not seem to flow or was taking for granted when I read this story so far.
- Lest you wonder, I most definitely hope you continue this story as there are so many interesting scenes you can include here. chuckle How about a flying (literally) trip to Diagon Alley to get their school supplies for the comign year and then taking the motorcycle instead of the Express to get to Hogwarts on Sept. 1. In the meantime, Harry & Hermione will be having all sorts of fun and adventures, as well as growing far closer and more intimate with each other, while the Order and the Weasleys go spare trying to find them adn worrying about what they might be up to. smile A passing encounter with Luna Lovegood, with or without her father, would add a nice dash of humor.
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