Work on your formation, man. What you got it is a big, fat wall of turd. Erm, I mean wall of text, yes.
A line break every once in a while would do you wonders. Might even make me want to read it!
Sheesh!
-mo
Author's response
Oops. I'm used to the WYSIWYG editor on FanFiction.net and on my website. Sorry. Should be fixed now.