Why, just /why/, did you put a freaking smiley in there? ^_^ is not a word nor a suitable expression for a story. Maybe when you're IMing your friends; but never in a story -.-"
Still bad grammar, and jees, learn to use commas correctly.
I know I sound harsh but it's for your own improvement -.-"
Author's response
although yes i will admit critical advice is needed and i appreciate your level of interest in my work i do think that your tone is a little harsh and possibly uncalled for here. it's not like i'm writing a novel!! it's some silly little thrill for me to excersise my writing skills. i do appreciate your opinion on the matter of punctuation, i can use it perfectly well, but this is just some website people like me use when they are bored.