It was a little boring. I almost fell asleep.
Author's response
well, what part of it was boring and how do you suggest that i fix it? This is a slow-moving story at first, but then it picks up and lightens up --probably by the 3rd chapter. I really appreciate that you took the time to criticize my work and tell me that it could use some work to appeal to a larger crowd than it does, but i need more than a rough outline of that problem in order to fix it. If you would give me the honor of acknowledging this response, please be a little more specific about what was so boring to you.