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21 reviewsChaos theory; a nargle flaps its wings in China, and Luna responds differently to Harry during their conversation before the leaving feast.. AU starting near the end of OoTP. Harry/Luna/Hermione. N...
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Thoughts of Pudding
(#) Holyblade8 2018-11-14
Sorry the last several chapters were fucking stupid. Having hermione join in would have been infinitely preferable than this utter bullshit angst you have been attempting to write.
You dragged this out for over 20 chapters and didn’t even resolve a single issue. Soap opera crap. Considering this story happened over a short period in time, you included extraneous information that heavily bogged down the story. You would leave a cliff hanger, then cut to pages worth of pointless filler that did nothing to add to the story. It got skipped. I don’t know about others but if I skip something, you might as well have never written it. The fillers presence at that point is annoying and I start questioning why I’m reading the story in the first place if I have to skip so much of it.
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