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Do you believe in angels?
3 reviewschapter 2 to I'm what you desire to see. Gerard remembers the first time he met rosie before he knew she was his guardian angel. RATE, REVIEW PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE, READERS!!!!!!
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I'm what you desire to see
(#) canustakemyheart 2008-12-28
I liked this chapter. I liked how the angle explained why he didn't see her all those other times. Makes perfect sense, ya know?
Oh and this sentence: "He began to squint as the bright sunlight which flooded the kitchen instead he faced to look at his Mom." I'd maybe rework that to something like: "The bright sunlight flooded the kitchen, making him squint. He turned around to face his mom ..." That sentence just didn't read as well as everything else for me.
Hope that was helpful!
=DAuthor's response
Thanks for the re-do on that sentence, I've just updated it. You're right it does read better in the way you put it! :) Oh, thanks for reading the second chapter x Leah.I'm what you desire to see
(#) MyChemtasticFools 2008-12-28
I really like it! I've read both the chapters.
I like the idea of the story, its nice & fresh; I havn't read a MCR fanfic like it before.
Keep up the great work!
-Erika [clinga]
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(#) shehadtheworld12 2008-12-29
hey :] i really really like this story and I can't wait to read more!!
it has a good plot,and I love the characters..great work..:]
-Danielle[shtw12]-
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