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Bred Ignorance
4 reviewsEveryone wears a mask at one point in there lives. Some even wear masks to hide not just from others, but from themselves as well.
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Masks we wear
(#) dennisud 2009-01-11
I like the fact that your fleshing out the minor characters as JKR didn't. Though not like a Teen novel As they are you deal with more adult issues and unfortunately these characters have to be adults for either side here.
I also like the fact that you have used Harry & Hermione to be a sort of catalyst here. I'd like to see more as you drive through all of the other characters. BTW will you keep to the girls here in this series? Adn will they be just the students, or will we see a snippet of Sinestra, Madam Bones or even Bella!
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(#) someguy39 2009-01-11
Interesting again. Needs a bit of editing. The line
...after Draco, my betrothed's father's failure...
needs better punctuation as I spent a minute trying to figure out what you obviously meant.Masks we wear
(#) Cateagle 2009-01-11
A rather insightful and moving piece; one hopes that Pansy continues this thinking for herself and manages to survive what's coming down. It does need a bit of editing and cleanup, but it's still a good installment.Masks we wear
(#) PhoenixNoir 2009-01-12
Hey,
really like this story, it seems to be going places, but i agree with the others, it needs some editing.
For example you use "than" in place on "then" almost consistantly.
Its "then she walked away..." not "than she walked away..."
However, i do like how you have given an inside look into some of the lesser characters.
~Phoenix
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