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Searching for the Power
(#) Brian64 2009-02-04
Alrighty then..
I have to say that I am impressed with the update rate. I can certainly forgive the occasional homonym mistake given how quickly new chapters come out. Let's face it, by and large the writing is technicaly quite good without too many mistakes, so kudos for that.
The plot... well, let's face it, since the nude occlumency started, it has become something of a PWP, but that's not necessarily a bad thing. It's all good fun until someone gets hurt.
Actually, that's where this review comes in.
After reading your reply to DJ32's plea regarding Hermione's cherry, I got a cold shiver down my spine that you didn't put that little question to bed (pardon the pun)
Forgive the obvious, but this is a Harry Potter story, not a Ron Weasley story. The only thing that wil happen if Ron 'gets Harry's girl' is that many of your readers will go into fits of rage, flame you, and dump your story like a hot potato. It's been done before.
Is Hermione Harry's girl in this story - well that's what you implied in your story summary - Hermione showing him love and all that. Therefore, you've tried to attract Harmony fans. Ergo, Hermione is 'Harry's girl'
I don't think you really understand how annoyed Harmony fans get when she ends up with Harry after being with someone else. How is she supposed to be this great love of his life if she's happy to be fooling around with someone else - especially Weasley?
You're already well past my comfort level with her relationship with Ron, so if things stay as they are or get any closer between them then I'm out of here. Frankly, I'm not sure if I will even risk ch.19 since it's possibly going to involve the outcome of Ron's powershake experiment. :(
I guess you gotta ask yourself the question; Do you feel lucky?
I mean... maybe you won't lose too many readers if Ron and Hermione end up shagging, but I can absolutely guarantee you'll lose at least one, and I've seen complaints on some of the yahoo groups about the R/Hr action.
Anyway, if your aim is to annoy Harmony fans, you're doing great. You're not quite at the unforgivable stage, but you're getting there rapidly.
Cheers,
Brian
Author's response
One of the best reviews so far. If it really has to be said then i will ruin that plot point.
before Hr gives in and goes all the way with R events will transpire to keep them apart until school starts. After a time apart and without constant stimulation in the form of study sessions does anybody think she will want anything to do with him?
Will he really want to deal with the drama or will he take up with another witch when he has a choice?Searching for the Power
(#) Cateagle 2009-02-04
Tres' hot!! I do enjoy this story and, Ron being Ron, I'm looking forward, with some trepidation, to seeing how he manages to mess upthe situation he has. I rather suspect at some point that Hermione's going to decide that as much as she wants a full relationship with him, she'd be best to cut her losses and go enjoy/share Harry and the girls who commit to him.Author's response
A perfectly reasonable assumptionSearching for the Power
(#) jasonthereader 2009-07-19
Even though this story is "smut", I prefer reading stories that have less flawed logic.
Basically, they're all treating Ron like shit...his own sister even. But Harry feels it is okay because Hermione says so (as he told her it was her choice).
Thank Merlin friendship isn't important eh?Author's response
Flawed logic?
I mean yes, I agree Ron is being treated like shite...however he is treating Hermione like a common slag instead of his best friend of 5 years. He is an idiot at this point and doesn't deserve her. Hermione just hasn't realized it yet.
His sister is into Hermione as well and knows he is being a prat. Maybe its crappy on all there parts but they are horny teenagers. They can't be expected to make perfect choices.
Friendship...true friendship is important. Ron however is a selfish jealous git who turns on Harry at the drop of a hat. He is not a true friend. He has the potential though.
That said, Ron always comes around once he realizes he was wrong.
Are you a R/Hr shipper then? Because if so this is the wrong story for you. Ron gets his own girl eventually and realizes what an insensitive git he was to Hermione and is able to forgive them even though as you say, they were really treating him like shite behind his back.
Honestly though! They keep inviting him to join them even after he knows some of what is going on! If he would have just been there to get all hot and bothered with Hermione instead of being lazy he would have gotten it on with her inistead of Harry.
Guess I can't say enough about it :) Unfortunately thats just how I feel about any Ron/Hermione relationship. Unless it is explained and done really well how they finally ended up together.
Even the Ron who whispers in her ear about "I like it when you get flustered" or some such is cute but not a long term relationship material.
Ron has to grow up first, he and Hermione should date until she figures out he is still too immature for her. Then after the break up maybe he has another girl to train him better while he grows up. Hermione might then date Harry or not...if she did I can't see why they wouldn't stay together.
After Ron has been shown to grow up in text, only then do I see him having a chance with her. What they do is not fight like an old married couple.
They fight like oil and water and Harry is the egg.Searching for the Power
(#) juanjoseso 2009-12-08
ron's an idiot and hopr in the end he doesn't get herimoneSearching for the Power
(#) Shadowdog11 2016-04-08
There's the Ron I want dipped in acid.. Curious how Harry will deal with the brothers. I hope it's with some variety of confidence instead of like another story I read recentlySearching for the Power
(#) EdTheBeast 2021-11-24
Does that make you think I a am a slag?" You need to get rid of the 'a'! I spot one other, but can't find it to put here.
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