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(#) hashbrown 2009-02-15
This story has a really great story line. It's just a little illeterate and sort of confuses the readers a bit and the formatting is confusing.
Perhaps put it through a spell check?
Really good story though, I'm not saying it's bad.
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(#) izziebella 2009-02-15
I think that this is a really good concept for a story...I do think that maybe you need to run it through a spell check, maybe? I'm really not trying to be rude, I just think that it would help the reader a lot. I think that this story is really interesting. I wonder if Gerard is gonna be like WTF? Why are you even talking to me, or if this will change his life and make it so that the band never happens...Well I'm really into this fic and I can't wait to see what happens next.
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(#) disturbedangel6 2009-02-16
Yea I agree, it's a great story line and I want to read more
But perhaps not explain the story as if you're talking to your friend about it... you know child-like...
And of course the whole spell check too
Perhaps a thesaurus lol
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(#) Fantasy_Fairy 2009-02-16
Yeah, so wheresyourheart is kind of writing the exact same story.
But anyway, you should work on your literacy.back in time
(#) prettychemical 2009-02-16
:) Hello.
This story has a great plot but its really non descriptive.
It`s like, Oh I saw Gerard Way over there. It doesn`t show much emotion or how she feels.
And like most have pointed out the literacy is very bad.
Here are some ideas;
- Get someone to read over it and edit the spelling errors.
- Describe how you would feel if that happened or what Kimmy was thinking.
But I love it, I really do. I`m just trying to help :)
Love it :D
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