- You know, I wasn't going to review, if for no other reason than I wasn't logged in and that's a bit too much work considering I'm eating a veggieburger. But, I remembered your little author's note and I hate when my stories don't get reviewed, so here I am, writing you a nice, long review.
I like this story, make no mistake, but if you could put more action into a given chapter that would be very much appreciated. I like the fact, though, that you're causing Frank this guilt and shame; it's reality and makes the scenario believable. Also, and I don't know /why/, but I absolutely loved the part where Gerard's grandmother said she was going to 'challenge Marge in a rematch'. Don't ask, just accept the compliment for what it is; it practically made me continue reading.
Anyways, I hope you update soon and, admittedly nine days isn't that long, I'm far too hooked to wait longer and half an hour.
Keep writing, love!
(#) -GuessWho- 2009-03-21Hey (:
I read this entire story in the last . . 12 hours, I think? So I haven't really had teh chance to review yet . .
Yeah, I really like this story, with everyone being connecting in each way. The whole Eric and Mikey out to get Frank bit should also be pretty interesting, and all their emotions too. I woner if Eric will take his old best friend . . looks likely.
Can't wait for an update (:
- Just wanna say one thing. I absolutely love this story. I don’t speak English ( I think this review’s gonna be one big mistake, so sorry for that) I mean, this is not my native language but it doesn’t matter to me. Your story is amazing, I just can’t stop reading :)
Author's responseNo, it was no mistake at all! Thank you for reviewing my story, and you have wonderful English =)
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