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Secrets of the Chamber
28 reviewsThe majority of the Chamber of Secrets has lay undisturbed for nearly one thousand years, but what will Harry find in the catacombs beneath the school. Post GoF. Nearly exams in OotP. No DOM. HP/DG
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Secrets of the Chamber
(#) BrotherBludgeon 2009-03-12
Wow, don't you just love it when people review your story so they can dictate the "right" way you should be writing it?
Because obviously they know so much better.
Although I will say this: Jimmy Carr isn't the worst role model you could have for a Harry Potter who has put away childish things. The fact that people constantly talk down to him leaves them wide open for sarcasm, cynicism, condescension, and vocal doubting of their sexual orientation.
Again, I'm against the idea of telling an author they don't know how to write their own story, but I'm also a hypocrite and I'm completely unable to keep any ideas I have to myself when I write reviews.
Blessed be,
-Brother BludgeonSecrets of the Chamber
(#) Praeses 2009-03-17
I really enjoyed the your use of the chamber...I always thought that harry could've of used a secret place only he could access a bit more...
Storywise, I think it was a very intriguing beginning, but there were a few parts that seemed a bit rushed and could've been fleshed out a bit more over a few chapters (ie. Harry becoming more powerful, him instantly trusting Daphne rather than just letting her hide in the chamber, meeting the magical snake/basilisk, etc). I feel that would've given the story some more depth.
Overall, its a very promising and intriguing beginning and I look forward to the next chapter!
Ps. As for animagus forms, I always thought Harry would've been an excellent bird of prey (an hawk/eagle) w/his love of flying...not so sure about Daphne as there is very little info available about her.Secrets of the Chamber
(#) Praeses 2009-03-17
Personally, I really liked the idea of Harry putting the chamber to good use, I always thought he underused a secret location only he could access.
Storywise, I thought that a few aspects were a bit rushed and could be fleshed out a bit more to give it more depth. For example, Harry instantly trusting Daphne w/his animagus brewing seemed a bit quick, I could see him showing her the chamber, but leaving that revelation for when they're closer friends. (other ex. meeting the magical snake, training to become more powerful magically rather than just stating it).
Overall, I found it to be a very intriguing and interesting beginning and I look forward to the next chapter. (Well Done!).
Ps. As for animagus forms, I always thought Harry would make an excellent bird of prey (eagle/hawk) w/his love of flying and propensity to fall off his broom ;). As for Daphne, not so sure as we dont know much about her.Secrets of the Chamber
(#) Praeses 2009-03-17
Personally, I really liked the idea of Harry putting the chamber to good use, I always thought he underused a secret location only he could access.
Storywise, I thought that a few aspects were a bit rushed and could be fleshed out a bit more to give it more depth. For example, Harry instantly trusting Daphne w/his animagus brewing seemed a bit quick, I could see him showing her the chamber, but leaving that revelation for when they're closer friends. (other ex. meeting the magical snake, training to become more powerful magically rather than just stating it).
Overall, I found it to be a very intriguing and interesting beginning and I look forward to the next chapter. (Well Done!).
Ps. As for animagus forms, I always thought Harry would make an excellent bird of prey (eagle/hawk) w/his love of flying and propensity to fall off his broom ;). As for Daphne, not so sure as we dont know much about her.
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(#) jfitzgerald236 2009-03-19
I can't wait to see the next update. There aren't enough pairings like this. Thanks.Secrets of the Chamber
(#) maddsloth 2009-03-28
Just out of curiosity what work out equipment did they use a thousand years ago? Nautilus model 00001 ‘with state of the art chain and rock pulleys counterweight system’. lol Cool story thus far thanks for writing it, but somehow I do not think Daphne would evade Draco till tomorrow night.
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