(#) mathiasgranger 2009-04-28Another good chapter, and of course a swift and justifiably harsh set of penalties for the lawless.
I like how you have Snape playing the game here, almost as if he never wants to fully commit to either side, while he secretly hopes Harry and Voldemort both die while leaving the pureblood side no more crippled in the process.
It keeps him striving to be more neutral in his dealings, unlike in canon where it was a ridiculous set of circumstances that kept him around.
You actually get the sense that he is a very talented spy in this story albeit, still a very unsavory and borderline evil sort.
Snog buddies with Luna, eh? Well as long as everyone else and her sister joins in a la Reordered that should be a sustainable relationship without having to provide excessive detail that takes away from the plot.
At any rate, its your story and I am enjoying it quite a bit so far so keep up the good work.
Thanks for writing,
(#) mathiasgranger 2009-04-28Another nice chapter, with the punishment match the crime in my opinion for all involved.
Snape is textured in this story, considering how difficult that is to achieve I applaud you.
Methinks Umbridge is about to have a very hard and very long fall down a set of stairs.
Thanks for the review,
- That was a great chapter nice work with Scum hole O I mean Malfoy. I like the bit with Harry & Poppy very sweet. Also in their review mathiasgranger said Umbich was due for a fall down some stairs can I offer this thought it not sufficient turn thr bich into a squib I don't know how but you are a much better writer then I. Thanks and see ya next time.
- I really liked this chapter. I found Draco's punishment to be very satisfying and I can't wait to see what Voldemort does to him. His plan was an utter failure and he will likely pay for his stupidity and arrogance with his life.
I also want to say I like what you are doing with Snape here. You have actually managed to portray him as a credible spy. This is a feat that J.K. Rowling utterly failed at so you got one up on her, but then again, that isn't saying much considering she thinks he is a hero.
It will be interesting to see the fallout of the events from this chapter play out. What I want to see now is Voldemort's next gambit. So far he hasn't made a move yet, so I am anticipating what his response to the latest events at the school will be.
- I'm loving this story, like I love pretty much everything of yours I've read. That said, I noticed a pet peeve of mine in this last chapter... one that I THINK you are the only one to do. What the hell is the MLES??? DMLE = Department of Magical Law Enforcement. MLE = Magical Law Enforcement. What the hell is the 'S'??????
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