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The Wizard on the Edge of Forever
(#) red_jacobson 2009-05-02
Thanks for the quick update, and loved Luna's letter! (and Hui's last line as well! GRIN)
redAuthor's response
Believe it or not, I had most of the chapter done about 48 hours after I posted the previous chapter. The biggest problem was writing Luna, She's fun to write, but a bear at the same time.The Wizard on the Edge of Forever
(#) Wonderbee31 2009-05-02
Luna's letter was pure Luna and loved how it came out there, as well as Hui also, and she seems to have something for Harry anyway. Liked to see Hermione's letter and her admitting that she was wrong for once, and her knowledge for Harry. Looking forward to what happens next, and would say that the marron and black is the upcoming starfleet uniform, right? Will be curious to see if Hui and Harry will be lifelong friends, or maybe more.Author's response
I'm glad that you liked it. I'll fully admit that writing Luna was a bear. She's fun but tough to write. Your right on the Uniform but they have to go through the Bland gray wannabe robes first. Even Harry's not going to like them. Beyond that, I cant say as it will blow the plot.The Wizard on the Edge of Forever
(#) DrT 2009-05-02
We;;, it will be interesting to see how you develop this from here! Sop many directions. . . .Author's response
Thank you. I have a Plan, and for the most part, I'm sticking to it. There have been additions since I started this but in general It's going to be a pretty good ride for everyone.The Wizard on the Edge of Forever
(#) dennisud 2009-05-02
Interesting prophesy! And enough to go on for those who love both titles there's enough clues to see a whole lot of things happening!
Love to see Hermione and Luna even in letters, and I also see where you are going.
dennisudAuthor's response
Glad that you liked it. Plenty of clues for people to think that they know where I'm going with this but not actually know. That way when the path that this little monster is on suddenly tosses a nasty twist their way, they can look back and go "So that's what he was referring to" I've got two things coming up in a few chapters and the groundwork is already laid or being laid. I don't think that anyone has thought or really seen what I've got planned. My wife helped me get both worked out today and I don't think that anyone will see these really coming.The Wizard on the Edge of Forever
(#) grookill 2009-05-02
I kind of think you blew a wonderful opportunity to come up with something other than horcruxes but given that this is a few hundred years later maybe a nice Klingon Disruptor and a Vulcan mind-meld can solve Harry's little problem.
As for Luna's letter: I'm a bit surprised you used "Quetzalcoatl" but in a way it fits. I think we've already seen the plaque. I'm still puzzled about who "the fanged one" is though.
Regarding Hui (and girls in general), I hope you take your time with Harry's relationships and don't focus too much on them. I'll just paraphrase (more likely butcher) an old about the British navy. "Ensigns have girls, Lieutenants have fiances, Commanders have wives and Captains have a families."
Good luck with the next chapter!
Author's response
Not really blown a chance in regards to the Horcruxes, more of I have a plan that is going to catch a lot of people off guard.
One person has correctly guessed the identity of the fanged one. from a certain point of view, its pretty obvious, but you need to really think about it. once you do and figure it out, you'll smack yourself for not realizing it. Use Luna/Ravenclaw logic and it makes sense.
Harry's relationships will come of age in their own due course.The Wizard on the Edge of Forever
(#) Cateagle 2009-05-02
Heh, Luna's letter was priceless and so typical of her (you nailed her style beautifully - congrats). The black and maroon is a nice hint of something that's not yet happened (and I'll bet they'll chuckle whne it goes). I've my suspicions about both the fanged one and the plaque and I'll be interested in seeing if I'm correct. Meanwhile, I most definitely think Harry should have that talk he and Hui discssed with the Poli-Sci instructor; if/when he happens to go back, 'twould be something useful to have with him (note, if/when he does go back, I hope he's able to take a few of his new acquisitions with him, but nothing that'll mess up technological development). You're taking this slowly and I'm both enjoying and appreciating as one who is an original Trekker (ST:TOS came out while I was in high school) and a HP fan.Author's response
I'm glad that you liked it. writing Luna was interesting. mainly because I normally don't even think that way let alone write that way. I hope that your suspicions about what luna said pan out, mainly because I'm not telling as of yet. Should Harry go back, I know what he's taking with him and it will be surprising If I decide to go that route. I do wish that I had been able to see the show in first run. It's too bad that I wasn't around yet. I wasn't born till '69The Wizard on the Edge of Forever
(#) BenRG 2009-05-03
A very nice new chapter. For all that I suspect this will be Hermione and Luna's only direct part in the story, it is still a major one. You caught their personalities and natures well, especially Luna's mischievous need to use her 'Looney' reputation to excuse her acting just how she wants to.
Re.: Luna's prophecy. Like all true Seers, Luna's writing if full of metaphor but it is easy to get a fundamental idea of what she is saying:
1) The Bumblebee's Sting - Somehow, Dumbledore trapped Voldemort in Hogwarts;
2) The Helopaths... pins - The Order found and destroyed all but three of the Horacruxes - Likely Nagini, the Diadem (as Voldemort's control of Hogwarts made accessing the RoR impossible) and Harry's scar are the survivors. Identifying the scar's true nature may be a critical aspect of the story. Maybe a Vulcan may meld with Harry and find the foreign mind residing within his scar.
3) The Serpent's Son is Voldemort (the heir of the house of the serpent - Slytherin). I'm looking forward to working out how Lily's protection works in this;
4) The Arena - The final battle will occur in Hogwarts. Luna has given Harry the access proceedure for getting inside the trap.
The rest await future revelations. I've got a feeling that 'her' was Harry's girlfriend, Kim. Does this mean that she will find her own way into the fleet - Black and Maroon, of course, represents the post-2272 uniform seen in ST2-TWoK onwards. However, Luna's counsel to Hui suggests that she may have a future with Harry of some kind.
The Hornswoggler... Kirk has often been described by Gene Roddenberry as 'Horation HORNblower in space'. That is one possible identification. Another is that it may be Spock - his Vulcan psychic abilities may be a critical tool in the Horacrux hunt.
The 'fanged one' might be Remus - That the Last Maurader helped prepare both the trap and a way for Harry to find his way in might give him a bit more confidence in its survivability (Dumbledore never seemed too bothered about that).
You know, I think I'm going to enjoy finding out how much I've got right. There is clearly a lot to find out.
Of course, there is no need to go to any juvenille heroics to finish this.
"Transporter Room Three to Bridge."
Harry touched the intercom panel on his left armrest. "Go ahead Transporter Room."
"Captain, the last... artifact has been beamed up and molecularly dispersed as you ordered."
Harry nodded. "Good job, Chief." He turned to the Dauntless's chief of security. "Lt. M'ktiy, lock phasers on target and fire."
The Caitan female nodded, her gold eyes narrowed with glee. Twin spears of golden light flashed from under the Dauntless's saucer and hit the target, the castle once known as Hogwarts. Inside, Thomas Marvello Riddle didn't even have enough time to realise that he wasn't immortal after all before he was reduced to his component atoms.
However, I think that Harry might want to take Hogwarts intact. After all, he has a magical civilisation to rebuild.
BenRG's Rating: 8/10Author's response
I'm glad that you liked it. As much as I'd like to use your little scene at the end, It's not going to happen quite that way but it is a damn good idea. Your ideas as to what Luna revealed are pretty close, but lets just put it this way, what I have in mind to do would be considered torture in most civilised societies. Not to Harry or anyone with him, but to Voldemort and any DE's that Harry may run across. If Lucius or Draco new what I had in mind, they would run screaming.
Now your guess about the Hornswaggler, is good but not correct. I will say this much It is a character that was seen on screen and had speaking lines in one of the star trek original series episodes and also showed their face in this story.
Harry will be telling Jim Kirk the truth eventually, but not right away. If you think about it, a cadet calling on a Captain of a ship of the line for a meeting or the Chief of Starfleet Operations for the same isn't going to happen. It would be the other way around with usually the cadet in question's next stop being either the Academy wedding chapel at Phaser point or to the deepest darkest prison cell that can be found.
Black and Maroon is a definite prediction on the uniform Change from the Bland Grey for ST:TMP to ST:TWOK. That one I'll fully admit and if someone couldn't get a that one, then all the others will be serious surprises.The Wizard on the Edge of Forever
(#) Grozt 2009-05-03
I think its great that you have managed to cath the essence of Luna Lovegood.... she´s HilariousThe Wizard on the Edge of Forever
(#) carvell 2009-05-04
A few torpedoes on Hogwarts should do the trick niceley but i get the feeling it wount be that easy, and i just read your responces to reviews HARRY GOT KIM PREGNEMT!!! and is liked by the kligons iam sure JT Kirk is going to be very impressed by his son in law!
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