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Achieving Clarity
(#) twilliams1797 2009-06-17
nicely done. I think a story could be written about Britain AFTER the exodus of muggleborn.. only a few purebloods who don't have enough sense to look after themselves.?
of course they will make a law that any first gen witch or wizard will be indentured into servitude..
again, nicely done, thanks.
TimWAchieving Clarity
(#) Wonderbee31 2009-06-17
Wonderful story Professor, really liked how it all played out, with even Myrtle getting a happy ending, and Snape a bit of one, though I definitely can't see this Harry naming his son after him(JKR did whut?) Glad to see Lav hang around, though I almost wondered if Ron was there somewhere surrounded by endless mashed potatoes and gravy, LOL. Glad to see that the wizarding world has been changed some, by the muggleborn and others who've decided it can go hang, and can just imagine this magical Britain self-destructing in a few decades. Well done story, and agree, what was JKR's point, if she put Harry through all that, and then, nothing changed?Achieving Clarity
(#) dennisud 2009-06-17
Well you did it and quite an entertaining ending too. I forgot about Lav and Ron being in the toss up and I'm glad it turned out as it did.
Oh and the way things went, yeah a looookn ass oneshot yet very exiting and definitely one to keep us coming back again and again (PArdon the pun).
pLEASE WRITE MORE!Achieving Clarity
(#) stick97 2009-06-17
Uh...
Can you send your dice to JKR?
Cause I personally hate what she did with the last two books as well.
Great story!Achieving Clarity
(#) magicmuffinseeds 2009-06-18
nicely done, was wondering where you would go from the cliffy in the last chapter.
Liked you having Lavender there to "not help"!
well doneAchieving Clarity
(#) LabRat 2009-06-18
A bit long for a oneshot, but all the better. I do have one thing you said that I disagree with.
**All I can say is thank God and the Goddess for fanfiction – where some really good writers get it right!
With patience and encouragement I hope to join their ranks someday.**
And just who the hell says you haven't already?
Really, that was a great read, and I might just have to try that roll of the dice bit. It does seem to make the story interesting. Only, I may do something with a reverse time and a coin flip on whether to change the outcome of certain major canon events (even though I'll still do them dif, the outcome will still be relatively the same).Achieving Clarity
(#) LabRat 2009-06-18
I almost forgot. As far as your thoughts on an Epilogue, just remember one thing...
The fact that Harry isn't with Ginny, and is with the three hottest girls in the series sans Fleur and Tonks (I mean a veela and a Metamorph, come on), your Epilogue, even as of yet unwritten is already better than the canon one. Plus, I like how Harry finally told that backwards magical community what was wrong with it; though I still doubt it will change at all (even if you did set the groundwork for the possibility).Achieving Clarity
(#) issabissa 2009-06-19
A wonderful end to a wonderful story!!! YOu have done a great Job!!! I loved it till the very end!Achieving Clarity
(#) siledubhghlase 2009-06-21
Norman:
Congratulations! Another triumph! I was sad to lose Ron, but Lav went with him, so they're having their own happily ever afterlife.
So it was Luna who ultimately did in the Dark Tosser. You go, girl!
I LOVED Harry's speech at the rally. He really drew a lot of stuff into perspective, didn't he? Rita's bye-bye, the Wizengamot cleaned house, and Draco got what was coming to him, the little creep. I loved how Harry exposed Scrimgeour for the fraud he was and then left the stage with his army in tow. Minister Shacklebolt. WOO HOO!
I loved this story through and through and I'm thrilled you didn't leave it as a one-off. It needed to be told. WELL DONE, GRASSHOPPER!
Sheila
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