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• Restless Heart Syndrome

  (#) shehadtheworld12 2009-06-17

  It's actually good for 3rd person, I understand how ya feel, I often get critical about my own 3rd person, but I like yours (: Looking forward to reading more when you get a chance (:

  Author's response

  Thank you. :]
  
  Yeah i know what you mean, I'm always very critical of my own work.
  Thanks.
  Will update as soon as possible.
  xoxo J

• Restless Heart Syndrome

  (#) MyFamousLastWords 2009-06-18

  Yeah like shehadtheworld12 said, it is actaully good for third person.
  
  Seems like a real good start. :)
  Pretty cool.
  
  ML, Fin Ox.

  Author's response

  Thanks. :]
  Will update as soon as I can. x]
  xoxo J

• Restless Heart Syndrome

  (#) Fantasy_Fairy 2009-06-18

  My advice would be to try and structure your writing better. Use paragraphs and spaces between them, to give more of an impact and make it easier to read.
  Not to be annoying, but you mispelt 'woman' lol.
  Apart from that, i think the story is really good so far!
  Update soon :)

  Author's response

  Thanks for the advice.
  But to be honest I thought it was structured. It was when I uploaded it. But my laptop seems to hate me. :[
  
  Yes i did mispell woman. Apparently there is more than one cranky woman in my story. :\
  xo

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