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I Want To Know Your Plans, and How Involved in Them I Am
(#) AshleyBaby 2009-07-09
Okay please dont get offended by this at all, its just constructive criticism...
Your story line is a little bland but it's not completely tragic. I think you should reread what you've written so far and find a way to add some substance to it in the future chapters. The dialogues a bit of a downer too. Just try and picture your characters saying what they do in real life..that might give you a better perspective.
Overall, I wouldnt give this story a failing grade. Just try a bit harder with the plot maybe. :D
Happy writing!Author's response
Thank you so, so much. I mean it. I'm really glad you took the time to do this. Hopefully, I can apply your advice the right way and my story will be better in the future.
-KellyI Want To Know Your Plans, and How Involved in Them I Am
(#) lostmyfearoffalling 2009-07-20
Hahaha. Mikey is funny. I agree with the above person; it just needs a little more. Something to seperate it because there are a lot of stories with a similar plot line (not saying you're plagarizing or anything but people have similar ideas). I think you could really make it awesome .
Can't wait for more! xoxoxI Want To Know Your Plans, and How Involved in Them I Am
(#) nicole_ownsxxx 2009-07-24
haha, yess!
headfirst for halos is like..my favorite song.
makes me wanna watch peter pan..think i'll do that..
but, i also agree with AshleyBaby.
also, you need more transition. the way things just happen on after the other, like no time passes. it's weird.
but i do like this story. :]
it's a fixer upper.
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