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The Dark Arts and Will's
2 reviewsResponse to a challenge made by jayu called 'Dark Harry'. its basically harry and hermione's path to the dark side.... HHr
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Harry Potter & Hermione Granger - Dark Lord & Dark Lady
(#) goofball44306 2006-04-07
Great. Kill the bastard, as I asked, not five minutes ago. Keep it up and don't get down at the lack of reviews.
Goofball
Author\'s Response: i have already writen 8 chapters, and the total words so far is about 45,000. and i dont write for the review anyways... i write because i like to :Di hate it when people stop writing their sotry because of lack of reviews....Harry Potter & Hermione Granger - Dark Lord & Dark Lady
(#) CrimsonRogue 2006-04-07
I like the concept, though I must admit a few things:
1. The idea of an evil/incompetent Dumbledore is almost overdone. I've seen it in way too many fictions.
2. The monetary system is "galleons" like the old shipping vessels, not "gallons"
3. The pratness of Ron is definitely overdone
4. Check your terminology and spelling! You gave Harry the title of "Barren" which means "incapable of supporting life" and is often used to describe a woman who can't become pregnant. You wanted the term "Baron" which is a noble title.
Author\'s Response: oh shit... im sorry about that... the next chapters should be better spelling gramma... i hope, i think i posted the ones that were not fully checked over sorry :(oh about the evil DD, prat ron, well yes they are done a lot, but i have not seen many storys with them and HHR, but this is mainly a DARK!HHr story, Ron is a small nothing character in this fic
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