AU, Post OotP, No HBP, The Weasley's believe in family first. Arthur must choose; what is right or what is easy, Harry Potter or Albus Dumbledore
(#) BenRG 2006-04-10
Overall a good story, although I think it ended far too quickly. I would have carried on for at least another chapter serving as an epilogue, filling out the future in a series of vinigettes, including inserts of the start of year 6 & 7, revealing Harry's girl and the final battle.
The end of Dumbledore was a strange anticlimax but it fitted the concept of an old man with failing health who was steadily losing his mind. I also think that Snape's end was handled correctly too. One way or another, it was always likely that he would meet his end for treachery, either at the hands of the dark or the light.
BenRG's Overall rating: 7/10
(#) wolff 2006-04-10
Too short! You had a great story going here, and then just decided to cut it off... I find that kind of disappointing. Otherwise it was quite a fun read.
good story, only the end was to short
Good idea and I like the way it played out. The more I think about it this was about the Fall of Dumbledore rather than the move of Harry to safety. I do like a good Fall of Dumbledore story though.
I liked this story, especially the wacked out Dumbledore. I don't think it was just dementia at the end, he might have been smoking something too. Loved it.
I have to agree that this was a bit too short.
Dumbledore sounds like what I've heard about with Alzheimer's that they can get hostile.
I think BenRG's idea of how to possibly extend the story might be nice if you ever want to.
i liked it! VERY VERY much.
You wrote a good story, even if the end is a bit short.
great story would like it to be longer and see what harry would be like after living with the wealseys after a few years
Great, you write it, build it up, then speed to the end. yawns Boring! Details people, details!! Other than that, it was well thought out and structured.
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