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• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Rob 2010-04-05

  female with the nest on her head.
  
  Best line in the chapter. :)
  
  Rob

  Author's response

  Oookaaay...
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) BioHazard82 2010-04-05

  Another great chapter. Is Harry going to be like a gray force user? He's already used the Force Choke, so it got me curious.

  Author's response

  Thanks. And yes. He distinctly said he was not planning to become a Jedi knight. Harry is hardened, and driven but not particularly evil,(though Dumbledore will likely think him so) but still has room in his heart for love.
  
  He's dealing with the people around him as I feel they deserve to be treated. More on that, later.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Jace1709 2010-04-05

  I'm liking this story, i don't normally review, but i had to make an exception for 1 part of this Chapter. The translation of the Gryffindor motto cracked me up, because i immediately had the image of Derek Trotter as a descendant of the Founder, lol.

  Author's response

  I appreciate your review, and more that you're enjoying the story.
  
  I'm unfamiliar with Derek Trotter, having never watched any of the shows he's featured in. Sorry.
  
  The Gryffindor motto:‘Qui audet adipiscitur’: (He who dares, wins.) Is the motto of several military special forces groups throughout the world. I thought it sounded particularly Gryffindorish.
  
  Until next time...
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) hammerhead 2010-04-05

  Kick ass chapter and story hope to see more soon.

  Author's response

  Thank you, and you will.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) jabarber69 2010-04-05

  that was cool...but sounds like the sas stole gryffindors family saying!

  Author's response

  OK. YOU tell them top give it back. Wait till I get my camera. Don't worry, I've been a paramedic too. I'm pretty sure I can put you back together...mostly. ;)
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-04-05

  I quite enjoyed this chapter and Harry's ept use of the Force (that was an appropriate tack to take with Snape, likely the only language he'd really understand). The dialog with Snape sounds like the kind of thing Harry's always wanted to say but didn't dare; now that he's been unbound and has an understanding of the Force, he can do so. I rather suspect that Dumbledore is going to become even more perturbed as events move along and his "weapon" starts acting and dealing for himself and his friends, not those that Dumbledore has selected for him (methinks Susan Bones is going to get added to the group (initially the "Ministry 6" assuming Harry still trusts them all) that Harry's training in the Force and other magic. Being the Heir of three powerful Houses is going to have some very interesting effects, especially the colorful bahavior of Dumbledore when he finds out that he's out of the decision loop there and Harry's already an emancipated adult with all the right and privilegess thereof (mind you, he'll probably also execute the responsibilities of his position(s) better than most in the Wizengamot, or in pureblood society in general). I do love the approach he's taking to freeing Hermione, just planting the seed and letting her natural tendencies take over and free her; I quite suspect this will further rattle Albus as, one by one, his tools start to "fail" him as they go their own way, not as he wills them.
  
  I'm quite enjoying how this is developing and I'm avidly looking forward to further chapters. BTW, I was quite amused by Hedwig's "title" for Hermione; be interesting to "hear" her titles for others.

  Author's response

  Heya Cat. I'm glad you enjoyed, and I must say I've never heard 'ept' used in that manner.
  
  I dealt with Snape the way I would, and the way I have always wished Harry would. In canon, the kid was pretty much a brainless pushover. I mean really! What kind of kid, especially an abused kid, would let that grease covered slimeball torment him the way he does, without a little 'payback'? Believe me, Harry took it easy on him. Imagine if he'd used the force to stop Snape's heart?
  
  It's not that he has the force, but that he now has the ability to do what he's wanted for years and not get caught. Actually, I really wasn't satisfied with the way Dumbley hauled him away, but I couldn't think of any other way to end that scene.
  
  Your suspicions are correct, Dumbles is not going to like the direction Harry is headed. He will try to interfere, of course, but Harry will be using the the most offensive power in nature to head him off.
  
  Attorneys.
  
  That's one of the reasons Harry contracted with the goblins, adn also why he had Mme. Bones read through the papers before removing the tracking charms. (The 'trace' is also something Rowling stole from Fanfiction. IF it really was based on magic, then Harry would have been facing two charges of underaged magic. The patronus, and the remote lighting of this wand.)
  
  Susan will be part of the group as will the ministry six, and many others. He's not doing this alone.
  
  Harry's position as head of three houses, will only be used once, but he'll appoint people he trusts, people not named Dumbledore, as proxies...to control his seats.
  
  For the purpose of this story, Harry's proxies will take care of the day to day business, and he'll have solicitors and accountants handling his estates, while he'll be in a remote location training his cadre. When this is over, assuming he wins, he can take over and restructure the wizarding world...if he wants.
  
  Albie ain't only out of the loop, Harry is going to marginalize him entirely. Remember, in the disclaimer, I won't be using either the Horcruxes or the Hallows, both of which I thought were really stupid plot devices.
  
  Hermione. It seemed the most natural way to me. She's as stubborn as he is, but with a fixation on authority figures. Without a good reason to suspect her idol, she'd refuse to believe him for a moment. Worse, she might turn him in, if she thought it would protect him...even from himself. She's like that.
  
  Dumbledore is going to lose control over a sizable portion of his pawns, and as it's going to happen in one big bump. As Quint said In JAWS: "He's gonna have a heart attack when he sees what I brung him!"
  
  There may be more interestin' titles to come.
  
  More is forthcoming, probably next week.
  
  Thanks for writing.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-04-06

  Yeah, attorneys can be one of the most offensively powerful forces in nature, as long as you get a good, competent one and with Harry's current array of talents and abilities, that won't be a problem. Given the contracts through the goblins with review by Mme. Bones, Dumbles is likely going to find his legal standing cut off at his crotch (with mayhaps a few other pieces removed, too). It should be quite interesting to watch as Harry builds a proper structure for dealing with his estates et al. and seeing how many purebloods get outraged because "that's not the way we've always done it"; likewise with the proxies he appoints to his seats in the Wizengamot, there's likely to be considerable outrage over his appointments flying in the face of tradition, but totally within the law.
  
  Now, I do know that if I were Harry, I'd most likely remove the Friends of the Flaming Fowl from my residence; let them meet on their money, not mine. If I was feeling generous, I'd even allow them to remove their files with them; if not, well, that's life in the big time, folks. Methinks there's going to be lots of outraged f folk, for different reasons, to keep Albus company; especially since all the compulsion and control means being used on Harry and his friends are being negated and their use highlighted to people who used to trust Albus. I don't think his vision of "the Greater Good" is going to look quite so good as everything comes out.

  Author's response

  We tend to give attorneys a ration of shit until we need them.l Unfortunately the few underhanded ones name the rest. the same goes for car sales men and shudder! politicians.
  
  While Bones is on his side, Dumbles is first and foremost a (URGH) Politician. the lowest form uf subsurface bottom crawling criminal on earth.
  
  Harry is going to get help from some of the few who won't give either Dumbledore or Voldemort an inch. Who? Read on.
  
  I am setting up the management of his estate like I would if it were mine. His first and most important priority now is to recruit and train, and so, after the next few chapters, he's going to let the professionals do their jobs.
  
  His proxies will be both the best for their positions, and acceptable to the rest of the council. Wanna guess on who they'll be? Two are in canon and one is an OC.
  
  OotP: In a couple of chapters, I'm going to do just that. He'll always have his supporters, which is why I decided to not use a couple of people to vote his seats. You'll learn who in a few chapters.
  
  I think you're right. Albie;s greatest strength, is in his silver tongue. EH tells as much as he needs to hook you, and then just enough to keep you under control, but never enough to do what's necessary.
  
  It seems to me that he's more concerned for the Death Eaters than their victims.
  
  And I really hate that 'greater good' It's like the version i got in both the navy and the Marine Corps. "The big picture. Translated it means: "Shut up do as you are told and let those with higher rank think for you, because you are obviously incapable of doing so for yourself...stupid."
  
  I hate the big picture too. (I had a bad attitude for the entire 23 years I was in.)
  
  Until next time...
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) crazyjim87 2010-04-08

  why did you decide to post the story here? and not on ff? that is my question. as far as the story goes i would like to see it being updated often

  Author's response

  That's a good question.
  
  I decided to post here because when I started posting, FF.n, had some rather draconic policies, including deleting all of an author's works without investigation, because one person made a complaint. They Appear to have eased back on that policy, so, given that many of the authors here also post there, I am seriously considering posting there as well.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-04-08

  Yes, "the big picture" was a term that generally made me very, very wary; too often it neglected those details so important to those actually doing and to the overall success of whatever was being attempted (I've heard it in industry enough times - we ended up pronouncing it sarcastically with finger quotation marks). I'll agree that Albus seems more concerned for the Death Eaters, I think it's part of his "pureblood" background where he's more concerned with preserving purebloods and their families than in taking care of their first-generation or "half-blood" victims; this could explain his close relations with and strong concerns for the Weasleys. I'm inclined to suspect Adromeda Tonks as one of his proxies as she's a daughter of the Black family and likely has the proper training and preparation; depending on just how Dumbledore-olatrous he is, Arthur Weasley might also be a good choice, assuming he gives a magical oath to vote as Harry would wish, not as Molly would wish.

  Author's response

  I'm in agreement. "the big picture' and 'it's a team effort' both mean the same to me.
  
  Andi will indeed be one of Harry's proxies, but Arthur, will not.
  
  There are three reasons. First and foremost, he in under Dumbledore's thumb, either directly or through Molly. Second, the blood-purists, (as opposed to purebloods) despise him. He's covered in ...gasp! POOR! He has no political influence and as such, isn't worth any of their time. (I HATE politics!) Lastly, I like Arthur. He reminds me of me. If he were in a position to oppose Dumbledore, he'd likely suffer a 'fatal accident'. Dumbledore does not like it when things don't go his way and he isn't loathe to using underhanded methods to get what he wants.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Cateagle 2010-04-08

  PPS. I did quite enjoy the passing reference to "Mac and Tosh", the Looney Tunes gophers; I remember them fondly. I have to admit that I also enjoyed the use of Force mind control on the librarian and on Filch; I wonder what Albus will make of Filch's behavior?
  
  One other thought as to Harry's proxies, perhaps a suitably high-ranked goblin? I'd think that having such a personage present would be considered a show of honor to the Wizengamot by the goblin horde (though the more extreme purebloods might not take it that way).

  Author's response

  It took me SO LONG to find out who those two were!
  
  Pince: What he doesn't know, can't hurt Harry. Unless he has a reason to look at those books and probes her mind, he'll have nothing to suspect. Since he feels he is omniscient, that's not very likely. By the first of September, the point will be moot anyway.
  
  Don't worry about Filch. It'll wear off.
  
  In time.
  
  I seriously considered having Graswold as a proxy, but the Wizengamot, is a 'good ole boy's club'. They would never allow a goblin, for any reason, to sit on the council. If it did somehow happen, they'd take steps to neutralize his vote, and Harry is going to need that vote.
  
  Alorkin

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