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Forever and Ever
(#) FamousLastWords09 2010-05-05
Oh no!!!!! How on earth is she going to explain that?! Lol poor Gerard, he's going to hurt when he wakes up.
Excellent as always I love the connection between Gee and Anna, I love that she's relaxing more although I fear this little episode will set her back a few steps.
More soon please, like tomorrow lol
xxForever and Ever
(#) sblood311 2010-05-05
Woah! Good chapter. She's quite the thing. Can't wait for more.Forever and Ever
(#) shortygirl 2010-05-05
Poor Gee thats gonna hurt in the morning..I wonder what she's gonna tell Gerard...Forever and Ever
(#) Larka 2010-05-05
Oh snap!! Lol I can't wait till the next chapter when Gee wakes up and Anna has to explain what just happened.
Lol. I wonder what Anna is hiding.
Update soon.
Tomgirl567 :DForever and Ever
(#) VendettaEmma 2010-05-05
Shit! What if Gee thinks he did something wrong? What's Anna gonna say? oooh, update soon!
:DForever and Ever
(#) lacerationgravityxxx 2010-05-05
oh shit!
i have the funniest image of him though!
great chapter. and hey, i'm thinking Anna and Claire don't need to eat regular food. am i right? haha!
can not wait for more.
xo
Forever and Ever
(#) Paramour 2010-05-05
ooh, I knew it. I so knew it about Anna and Claire. dances I CAN MAKE BASIC CONNECTIONS! YAY ME!
All right, so I've never reviewed this before and I SHOULD have, so here I am, making up for it with a veeerrrryyyy long review that will be chock full of compliments and the occasional constructive criticism. Because that's just how I roll.
Mmkay, firstly, I like how you make Claire's and Anna's speech so archaic sounding. (also, it was the first thing that gave it away for me.) It's a great foil of the rest of their speech, with the cursing and contractions they use. Very nice touch.
Secondly, you now have me filled with a burning desire to know EXACTLY what Anna is up to, because quite frankly, her Gerard obsession is a mite creepy, to me anyway. Also, I want to know what bad memory she has that caused her to throw a man across a room.
Thirdly, your subtle clues are simply delicious. I love how you refer to the past vaguely, and give no time frame, such as 30 years ago or something of that sort. You can pace yourself well.
Fourthly, (here comes the concrit), make sure you throw in a few commas, or periods, to break up those uber long sentences you write. They're excellent in moderation, like everything else, but remember, don't be afraid of short sentences :]
I should stop now. O.o
Hope this helped/didn't bore you!
-AllieForever and Ever
(#) aldualma 2010-09-18
WHAT THE FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK! SHE PUSHED HIM SO STRONGLY, GOD I NEED TO READ MORE! but first, a coffee u.u
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