(#) SmashAuthority2 2010-05-11This was AMAZING. I simply loved it. I know how you usually write funny stuff but this was touching.
It really pi**ed me off that guy Paul was bullying her so badly. Was he doing it because he liked her, or was he just a sick mother? Either way I told my bro about the dude picking on a girl and my bro (who's a bit of a psycho) started ranting about how he was going to rip his head off! I had to remind him it was just a story!!
And I liked Jared's character, he was sort of mysterious. A bit like superhero's are!
Anyway, before I fill up the whole damn page and bore you to death. Once again, good job. This was an enjoyable story. Well done. xx
Author's responseHaha, thank you! I guess in a way Paul liked her. I mean, what kind of girl would like a dick like that, y'know? (I personally like guys with a little bit of meanness in 'em, but ah!)
Your brother sounds cool :) I'm glad I got such a reaction out of you, chickie!
My teacher is making me wait till Thursday so that I can read it to her Lol She says she wants to "Hear my voice when she pictues it" because it's been so long since I've read to the class ^^
I lurve you!
- it's REALLY a good one! congratulations! i really loved it. touched me deeply... gives the food for thoughts...
why can't fics be published, i wonder! some of them are definitely worth it! ^.)
Author's responseHaha yeah, I often wonder the same thing (:
You are very welcome, my dear!
- Great stuff. This is a great example of how you can write a good story without getting too intimate. Beautifully written and a swell ending. You connected the paragraphs well and there was a great flow of thought and emotion. Good transitions between scenes. I'm really impressed. Good on ya!
Author's responseThank you so much! This is one of the nicest compliments I've ever gotten. I'm real glad you enjoyed it:)
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