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Prologue: Serendipitous, Much?
8 reviewsHarry is kicked out of the Dursley's during Christmas 1989. He finds his way to London, where he wanders into the Leaky Cauldron and is taken in by Tom the barman. Harry's life is soon turned upsid...
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Heir of Sword and Stave
(#) ChiVayne 2010-05-14
You need a convincing reason why Tom wouldn't notify the ministry, which would eventually bring in Dumbledore and Harry would be returned 'for his own good'.
Maybe Tom does notify some magical equivalent of Child Protective Services, which puts him into magical foster care. There would be no strong reason to notify Dumbledore of such a thing, no matter his positions, since this would be a standard thing to do.. Dumbledore doesn't notice until the blood protections fail, and then it's a done deal.Author's response
you probably never got a chance to read the first draft I made of this story, but I put in that when Tom found Harry he had a Healer look at him and discovered he was suffering from massive malnutrition and was sickeningly underweight. Besides, a bit of background for Tom I intend to work in at a later date is that he himself was part of the magical equivalent of Child Protection Services and thus his decision to look after Harry himself. Harry will be adopted by another family some time soon and you will be surprised by who it is...Heir of Sword and Stave
(#) longreachjones 2010-05-14
Now THAT is what I call an opener! Very nicely done on this attempt.
RE: your plans for a writing style, as an idea, you may want to plan several chapters ahead, then flesh it out a chapter at a time, this way you don't get as many continuity issues as you might, at also helps somewhat with writer's block.Heir of Sword and Stave
(#) jabarber69 2010-05-16
interesting story, seems to be well written and it is catching your attention too, but why was he without footwear, seems to me in a house that is colder than sin cause of petunia adversion to a large fire in the fireplace then he should of been wearing some kind of shoes, at least you would think that now wouldnt you....Author's response
come on, it's the Dursleys we're talking about here, d'you think they'd let him wear shoes and socks? they'd be more inclined to make him try and freeze to deathHeir of Sword and Stave
(#) DarQuing 2010-05-18
This looks like it could be interesting. I look forward to more of this story. :)
Hopefully this question will be answered in the next chapter, but I'm asking anyway, just to make sure you remember: Why doesn't Dumbledore send Harry back to the Dursleys? Does McGonagall explain to him that Harry shouldn't go to a family that would kick him out like that? Or maybe Tom doesn't tell Dumbledore or the Ministry.Author's response
Tom never told Dumbledore or the Ministry about finding Harry, but soon Harry will be officially adopted by a family and Dumbles will be unable to do a thing about it.Heir of Sword and Stave
(#) Cateagle 2010-05-19
Well, it's a different and intereting start to a story. I'm going to be quite interested in seeing where this goes.Heir of Sword and Stave
(#) Iccolo-Styne 2010-05-20
So Harry is 9, but knows about the Leaky Cauldron? What's the deal with that?Author's response
he didn't know about the Leaky Cauldron, it was sheer luck that he happened to find his way to London and found the Cauldron.Heir of Sword and Stave
(#) torrmented11 2010-06-11
Wow great story. I felt as if i was waching it in my minde.
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