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• The Demon Lord

  (#) BioHazard82 2010-08-18

  Another great chapter. Tho when you give your reaction to what had happened, like what Harry did in the alley, you don't need to go through EVERYTHING he did all over again. All you need is to express what he felt for the situation because the readers already know what went on.

  Author's response

  sorry about that, that is one of my bad points, repeating myself... and that is what I'm trying to change.

• The Demon Lord

  (#) stag 2010-08-19

  realy great story keep up the good work

  Author's response

  thanks for the review mate...

• The Demon Lord

  (#) dhampirkinfolk 2010-08-19

  I've tried over and over again to read your stuff, because you do have some good ideas. But I just can't get past the fact that technically, they're total garbage. It makes reading them a chore rather than a pleasure.
  
  PLEASE make finding a good beta a top priority.

  Author's response

  I DO have a beta reader, but she has got work and it'll be some time before she can send the beta work back to me... so give it some time.

• The Demon Lord

  (#) Reader458 2010-08-19

  Another nice chapter. I'm looking forward to when Harry goes to pick up the Muggle clothes.
  
  Good luck with the writing
  Reader458

  Author's response

  Thanks for the review mate, I too am looking forward to when Harry goes to pick up the Muggle clothes...

• The Demon Lord

  (#) Genericrandom5 2010-08-19

  Putting aside the fact that you still seem to be unable to focus on any story for a longer period of time, you're really avoiding the smut.
  
  ...get to the point already! Finish a story! You'll feel much better once you manage to complete something. And you'll be a much better writer.

  Author's response

  Listen mate, I know I don't often focus on just one story, but the thing is my muse don't always want to work on a story so I go with what my muse want to work on... so I write what my muse wants me to write.

• The Demon Lord

  (#) lycus 2010-08-20

  I do like the story, but is seems like Harry is losing control of himself and his fake mother is setting him up. I really hope that Harry can find some one who can help him control the demon so that Harry stays Harry but with the demonic powers, And we don't get a demon with Harry powers.

  Author's response

  Where is the fun if Harry always keep control of himself... :P

• The Demon Lord

  (#) Any1 2010-08-24

  Nice work so far. Don't worry about it being unbetaed, despite what others may say. It's the ideas that make a story worth reading, not spelling and grammar.
  
  I hope to see more of this story soon!

• The Demon Lord

  (#) Kenichi 2010-08-26

  good stroy and it's a different idea than most harry becoming a demon instead of a superhero goody 2 shoes so i really like it keep up the good work

  Author's response

  Thanks for the review mate...

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  (#) Kacoo100 2010-08-27

  this is a great story when r u going to ad more

  Author's response

  workingg on the next chapter now...

• The Demon Lord

  (#) lady-baronessmage 2010-08-27

  Its a great story. It is nice being able to read stories where Harry really isn't all that nice; I mean after the shit he's been put through by the Dursley's, and Dumbledore not mention I hate how Mrs. Weasley tries to mother him all the time. She needs to lay of; same with Ginny and Ron's a prat.
  Keep up the great writing. But remember everyone still needs to be loved, especially Harry.

  Author's response

  Thanks for the review mate, I agree with you, after everything that Harry went though, you wouldn't think he would be all that nice and forgiving...

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