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The Unmentionables...?
(#) Darkmark66 2010-11-01
A fantastic chapter Harry/Fleur was epic they make a great couple and life would never be boring when your with a Veela I am pleased Fleur is not with Bill as the Weasleys treated her so badly in the Books Fleur would not be happy with the name Weasley it would have been better for Bill to not marry her or take her name its not like Mr Weasley lacks people to carry on his name.
Great and funny line "I'll 'ave you know that this dildo did more for the light side than Dumbledore ever did!"
I really hope for more Harry/Fleur stories. I can't wait for the next chapter thanks for this one.The Unmentionables...?
(#) tmctflyboy 2010-11-02
yes harry/fleur!!!! finally another story with them together, even if it was just one chapter. really hope for more harry/fleur in this story or another one.The Unmentionables...?
(#) w00tness420 2010-11-03
It was a fantastic and amusing read like some good Harry/Fluer stories I've read. Keep up the good work!The Unmentionables...?
(#) chrisguy9017 2010-11-05
I like your version of Fluer's character and you provided enough information to paint a decent picture of her personality and character.
I think the Tomb raider was the perfect costume for her.
Although the main focus was sex with Fleur; this chapter read more like an actual story and less of another conquest of the Halloween party.The Unmentionables...?
(#) chrisguy9017 2010-11-05
A very Cool Chapter.
I like Fluers character and always felt she was underused in Cannon. Her character has so much potential, and I am always glad to see her well get some justice in your work.
Although the main purpose of this chapter was for Harry to shag Fluer, when I read this it seemed to have more plot and less smut than some of the rest. Probably because you put some effort into describing the characters past, especially Fluer.
The Unmentionables...?
(#) LabRat 2010-11-29
*Harry struck without mercy or pity. He knew he literally had Fleur in the palm of his quite wet hand. In a cunning attack, he gently but firmly pulled the skin of Fleurs' woman hood up, exposing her throbbing clit to the heated air, latching on to it with his teeth to gently hold it in place. He slid the now throbbing dildo home, focusing it directly on her g spot, sending strong pulses of magic to the tip. Harry began to rapidly flick his wet tongue at her trapped clit, as her thighs clamped down on his head. He channeled even more magic through the tip of his tongue, while visualizing a snake, triggering his Parseltongue talent. Harry felt her arch and begin to convulse almost uncontrollably, and added the final touch, sliding his soaked middle finger into her rectum and alternating the pulsing magic into her arse. The heels that had been pounding his back vanished, as her legs went straight out, the toes clenching uncontrollably. Her animalistic howls echoed throughout the chamber, as she vocally expressed her feelings.
Fleur had slammed her hands flat onto the altar, and could feel her nails gouging the golden surface. She couldn't speak, couldn't think, couldn't control herself! She felt her body buck and suddenly she reached down to pull Harry up, closer, away, something! ANYTHING! Her hands dug into the old fedora, and that small infernal voice asked an odd question.*
Easily the hottest two paragraphs in fanfiction.The Unmentionables...?
(#) Draconmagi 2010-12-13
bloody good as...might wanna look through the spelling and grammar though
absolutely hooked
keep up the good work and i'm lookin forward to the next chappie :DAuthor's response
Unfortunately, I don't have a beta, which makes OpenOffice the closest thing I have to another pair of eyes.
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