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Talks and fast confessions
21 reviewsThe Dursley's were sent away for child neglect when Harry was young, Dudley went to live with his aunt marge and Harry went to an orphanage and was believed dead,taken in by a muggle captain and tr...
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The Unexpected Hero
(#) riegert8 2006-05-28
I think this a great storty. I can't wait to read more. When will Harry boss and Liana family find out that they still alive ? And when will tell Liana family who he really am ?The Unexpected Hero
(#) riegert8 2006-05-28
I think this a great storty. I can't wait to read more. When will Harry boss and Liana family find out that they still alive ? And when will tell Liana family who he really am ?The Unexpected Hero
(#) riegert8 2006-05-28
I think this a great storty. I can't wait to read more. When will Harry boss and Liana family find out that they still alive ? And when will tell Liana family who he really am ?The Unexpected Hero
(#) riegert8 2006-05-28
I think this a great storty. I can't wait to read more. When will Harry boss and Liana family find out that they still alive ? And when will tell Liana family who he really am ?The Unexpected Hero
(#) riegert8 2006-05-28
I think this a great storty. I can't wait to read more. When will Harry boss and Liana family find out that they still alive ? And when will tell Liana family who he really am ?The Unexpected Hero
(#) riegert8 2006-05-28
I think this a great storty. I can't wait to read more. When will Harry boss and Liana family find out that they still alive ? And when will tell Liana family who he really am ?The Unexpected Hero
(#) Binny 2006-06-07
I think you meant "anaconda" instead of "viper" during Harry's life story.
Also, If I were in your place, I would cut down on the pet names. Harry's only said her real name twice and the I think too many pet names (sweetie, honey, etc...) raise up the puke-0-meter. Some here and there is great. Too many... eww.
Anyway, good story! I like it.The Unexpected Hero
(#) Euphemism 2006-06-17
Wasn't sure whether to rate this as original or illiterate - you really need to work on that. The huge block of text was just one large chunk of exposition - it should at least have been broken into smaller paragraphs. The 'stealing Dumbledore's knowledge' was also a bit excessive and cliche'd; it would have been better if Harry had earned his skills in magic.
Still, the characters and situations are interesting.
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