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• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Wolfric 2010-12-26

  Fine chapter. I would think that providing a fake environment for Trelawney would be both more bother and more risk than it is worth, especially since tubing her would not harm her and she would never even know the passing of time. Hopefully the nanites used on professor Dumbledore can't transfer to others, what if he has unprotected sex with some poor student, like Draco? Thanks for writing. W.

  Author's response

  Harry is still Harry. He has a sense of fair play that makes him do some stupid things. He wants to be as fair as he can, but will take the action necessary to complete his mission. If the compulsions are strong enough, he'll have no choice but to tube her. If she can overcome them, he can bring her to the castle.
  
  ~Hopefully the nanites used on professor Dumbledore can't transfer to others, what if he has unprotected sex with some poor student, like Draco? ~
  
  EWW! Just EWW!
  
  Seriously though, The nanites are specifically designed for Dumbledore, and those close enough genetically to him that they can share blood. Since like so many others, the Dumbledore line is ended, that means only Aberforth would be affected. I'm having harry remove him to a place of safety in the next chapter.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) zamia 2010-12-27

  The two words that would scare the hell out of any young bloke, "I'm late", spot on. Love Dobby's pranking side. Looking forward to seeing Albus suffer some more. Top read. Have a good festive season. Cheers.
  Z

  Author's response

  Thanks for the thoughtful words. Glad you're enjoying the show, and as for those three little words...yup.
  
  More Albus bashing to come, and Dobby might get in a few more...you never can tell.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) vheritas 2010-12-27

  I'm guessing you have some plans for Sibyl, otherwise she'd have been tanked straight off, so I look forward to seeing what they are.
  A fine and extremely readable chapter.

  Author's response

  Quite honestly, I'm not really certain I want to integrate Sybil. She was a bit player in canon and the students have a huge load to deal with without her doomsaying. On the other hand, she might be a valuable source of information on Dumbledore's behavior. I'm leaning toward the compulsions being too strong and she goes into the tank.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) Dagda06117032 2010-12-27

  Dobby is one sadistic elf. LOL Of course having Harry as his "master" he is likely tapping into Harry's "darker" nature. But we all know Harry will never allow himself to go dark.

  Author's response

  It's more than that. Dobby knows Lucius is beholden to Voldemort and Dobby hates Lucius with a passion. How much more will it take to get Voldemort to take his frustrations out on Lucy. On the other hand, now that Voldy is aware of the elf slipping in and out, he might take some measures to prevent it.
  
  Of them all, I'm least concerned with Dobby going dark. Like Fawkes, I believe his nature would prevent that.
  
  However, it wouldn't preclude his exercising hie mischievous side from time to time...
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Disruptor 2010-12-27

  Well, Harry's revenge for the Valentine stunt was interesting and the repurcussions.
  
  The honey joke went a bit far, but still....
  
  Habenero peppers? Hot, but not up to the Diablo Pepper(looks like a cherry tomato). Bread with cream cheese spread can counteract the burning from peppers most of the time. Although I'm not going to try Pure Cap(10++++ on the heat scale). Still that was a pretty nasty prank that Dobby pulled.
  
  What an idiot that moron Draco be. I'm surprised the Board of Govenors has not removed him from being a prefect.
  
  Whew. The Deez realize that Carolyn is a major target. Greyback? There is a thing that needs to be removed, along with that new were you just introduced. Amelia's comment before she left was intersting and did show that she undersatnds the problems that the new tactics will cause.
  
  At leasst Sybil isn't totally useless and does care about passing her knowledge down.
  
  I do hope Arabella regains the memories of her children and grandchildren and maybe Harry can arrange a meeting between them and Arabella.
  
  It looks like Harry got the Longbottoms out just in time. Dumbly's back up plan has backfired. I wonder about 'cure' that Snape has.

  Author's response

  Heya Disruptor.
  
  Since all the sex in this fic is kept off-screen, I wanted to give a little taste to the readers. 'sides, she did prank him first.
  
  ~The honey joke went a bit far, but still....~
  
  Oh, I don't know. I've seen jokes go a lot farther than that and still be OK.
  
  Habeneros: To me 350,000 on the 'burn yer arsehole out' scale is hot enough for me. I know there are hotter peppers, but most of them are considered deadly weapons.
  
  On the other hand, who deserves a severe case in indigestion more than Ol' Voldy?
  
  Draco: I wonder what Draco would have turned out to be like had he been raised by the Weasleys?
  
  Anyway, Dumbledore is protecting him. While the board is mostly aligned with Amelia, he still has a bit of influence. He could argue that it's so late in the year it would be counterproductive to remove him because of a 'minor dispute', or other such tripe. He is Dumbledore after all.
  
  Deez. it was a lucky shot. While it makes sense to me, fortunately Voldemort does not recruit for brains. Equally fortunate, the guy who came up with it, was in the group of captured Deez.
  
  Amelia's warning was just that. It wouldn't do to get to comfortable. As sun Tzu said: "All warfare is based on deception."
  
  Greyback will meet his end at the end, and one of his first victims will be there to watch.
  
  Sybill is a problem for me. In canon, she's basically useless. She believes she's more than what she really is. On the other hand, one of the finest teachers i ever kjew, hd no credentials. h wasn't teh brightest nor the best trained, but hehad a dedication to his art that made him an excellent teacher. with Divination, if one has the gift it can be trained, but without that gift, you'd be better off studying something else. Rowling had Harry take Divination for two reasons. First, he kept the slacker company, and second, she wanted a way to introduce the prophesy to Harry.
  
  I pulled her out of Dumbledore's clutches to keep her alive, but by allowing her to wake, Harry's opened a huge can of worms. I'm still undecided about what to do with her. If i can find a way to neutralize the compulsions, (Teresa has a good one) I might put her into the castle, but honestly, she has no real, definable function. I'm heavily leaning towards tanking her.
  
  Arabella will regain her memories, but it won't be soon. As I indicated, it took years to do the damage. trying to undo it in one day is like going on a crash diet.
  
  Any meeting will have to wait until after the war is over.
  
  Longbottoms: they've been safe for a month. Harry got them out in early January. he anticipated a military threat and took the necessary measures to eliminate it.
  
  The problem with Dumbledore is twofold. When he's left on his own, he plans big plans and lets the details fall to the side. When he's called on it, he makes batter plans and anticipates the need for backup plans.
  
  His back-up plan for this, will be someone we all know and hate. Remember, he's also not-so-slowly losing his marbles.
  
  The potion. Though there is little to support it in canon, in fanon there are references to anti-cruciatus potions and the like. I figure if anybody would need to develop such a thing, it would be Snape. Hell, he could sell it to the Deez after an audience with hizzonor.
  
  Simply put, it was a lie. Dumbledore want's the hospital to release the Longbottoms to him and unless there was a compelling reason,they would not.
  
  Well, until next time...
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) Wonderbee31 2010-12-27

  Good section, and looks like Harry's got Dumbledore's number but good, and will be curious if Sybil is gonna ever be effective, or stay on "Tatooine" for a good while? Will be curious if Harry can jump start her force ability later on, as well as what all else will happen next with he and his love, though a cool section with him being tremendously happy at the prospect of being a father, though a shame that Hermione is still so uptight about his love for her and her belief in it.

  Author's response

  Thanks, Wonderbee.
  
  I'm still up in the air on Sybill. Harry can keep her on 'Tatooine' until the sandstorm ends but not much longer. I'm leaning toward the compulsions being too strong to overcome and his tanking her until it's all over.
  
  I never intended for Sybill to be able to use the force. Her greatest accomplishments are turning out viable seers, and that's pretty much it.
  
  I remember when Pauline told me we were having a baby. I couldn't stop smiling for days.
  
  Hermione: She's always had self-image issues...even in canon. Most teenaged girls do (and a lot of teenaged guys, too!)
  
  Until next time...
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) 910755 2010-12-27

  a most satisfying sw/hp crossover. very well written.
  romance, war, and humor are all blended together very well.
  a most excellent read i am most definately looking forward to the next chapter.

  Author's response

  Thank you. I'm flattered.
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Teresa 2010-12-28

  Hmmmm....perhaps Harry should leave most of the pranking to the twins, Remus, and Dobby! But on the other hand at least his students know that even their jedi master can have his clueless moments via his girlfriend/fiancee! Their response to Harry and Hermione was priceless! I also enjoyed Dobby's prank on Voldy! Snape better hope that it never occurs to Voldy that he could have avoided praying to the porcelin god. I also loved Voldy's firm technique with his little friend.....just blast the thing open! Snape's precaution on the replacement bottle might have worked but he'll pay for it in spades! It couldn't happen to a more deserving person! I doubt that any DE could get a reasonable insurance policy, but if Snape could even get an appointment I'd be suprised! Will the DE's start volunteering for missions just to avoid the madman with the bad attitude? On the whole it might be easier to face a lightsaber and lose a few body parts then to deal with their boss. Who's coming up with Voldy's current plans? Is that person plotting an escape hatch for themself if necessary? After all, Voldy's "favorites" seem to meet unpleasant ends eventually! Did Nagini find a nice spot to hide during Voldy's nap? I also liked seeing Draco's run in with Prof. McGonagall! I do feel a little sorry for Mr. Filch though, having to deal with Draco must really get on his nerves! Does he get overtime for the inconvience? Trust Dumbles to come up with another nasty plot, and I hope he freaks out when he realizes the Longbottoms are safe. Will Amelia and Augusta use that little written statement of his soon? (crosses fingers hoping to see Augusta putting the beatdown on Dumbles) I also respect Harry's decision to take care of the lemon drops himself. He and Dobby make a great pair! I loved seeing Harry and Hermione's talk with Trelawny, and I hope that she does accept that they were trying to help her! I was wondering, if she does start to trust them would they be able to track the blood item(s)that Dumbles used to keep those compulsions on her? Dobby was able to find Hermione's.....or could he do that because he was a trusted friend? It looks as if Narcissa might make a move soon; will it be to get herself and/or Draco out of this mess or set Voldy up with the Aurors. I was also wondering if Draco's mission will be the thing that leads to both he and Dumbles being booted from Hogwart? As always, thanks for a fun chapter! :)

  Author's response

  Harry has never been much for pranks...probably because Dudders pulled so many cruel jokes on him. Association, don'tchaknow!
  
  Response: I recall a similar incident as a younger man, (waaaayyyy back in the late Cretaceous) when my then girlfriend said something similar about silk straps. The next morning at Quarters, I received a gift of 47 sets of silk straps. Even the Division officer bought a set!
  
  Dobby thanks you for your praise. He quite enjoyed pranking the-most dangerous psychotic in Britain.
  
  ~Snape better hope that it never occurs to Voldy that he could have avoided praying to the porcelain god.~
  
  I can just see that conversation...
  
  "Severus?"
  
  "Master?"
  
  "Do you recall last week, you had me force myself to vomit?"
  
  "Yes, master. You had to purge the contents of your stomach in order to..."
  
  "Why didn't you simply vanish the contents of my stomach?"
  
  "..."
  
  "it is a simple healer's technique, is it not?"
  
  "..." (Snape pulls his collar away from his neck.) "Is it getting hot in here?"
  
  "It's going to get much hotter! Crucio!"
  
  Voldy's technique worked until Snape replaced the bottle, and yes, he's going to feel some heat for doing that. He will calmly explain that Voldy is taking a very dangerous chance with his life and all. Voldemort will listen nicely and then disregard him entirely. In May he will find a way to overcome Snape's restrictions entirely. I want him nicely addicted by the time he faces Harry. ...Not that it's going to do him much good.
  
  ~Will the DE's start volunteering for missions just to avoid the madman with the bad attitude?~
  
  Hey! There's an idea! A nice quiet prison cell four hundred feet beneath the antarctic ice shelf has to be more comfortable than living under Voldemort!
  
  Draco is a punk. He's had daddy's name and money behind him for so long he's never learned self-protection, so naturally he doesn't understand that there are people smarter than him (Dumbledore has a similar mindset.)
  
  Insurance: I understand Lloyds of London will insure pretty much anyone. It'll only cost you every nickel you have.
  
  ~Who's coming up with Voldy's current plans?~
  
  Why, I am, of course.
  
  Escape hatch? Not likely. I want his troops to see for themselves where following a madman has gotten them.
  
  I also feel for Filch. Draco is a malingering aristocrat who should have had a personal meeting with Robespierre and Msu. Le Guillotine in the courtyard of Le Bastille.
  
  Overtime? Actually, I don't think Dumbledore pays him at all.
  
  My question is: Why would a magical school employ a non-magical janitor, when the elves do all the work? Especially given that he hates students with a passion, and has a grudge against the world.
  
  Sooner or later, Dumbley is going to learn that he's been two steps behind his enemy all along...but not just yet. And yes, he's going to throw a tantrum.
  
  The notebook, parchments and statements, are just to keep him out of trouble after Harry does his thing. If he decides to stir the waters, he'll find himself in a whirlpool.
  
  Harry's decision: Is my own. If I'm going to condemn him, I'll do it myself.
  
  I'm getting some grief over Trelawney. Harry's innate sense of fair-play, made him revive her, but his duty to his troops will make the final decision.
  
  The only way I can see them tracking the blood is the way Dobby did before. However, given that he's lost control over Harry, Hermione and Ron, not to mention Arthur and the rest of the Weasleys, when Dumbledore discovers Trelawney is gone, he'll put the numbers together and might decide to destroy the blood, or move it to some place not even a house-elf can get to it. There are good's and bad's with either move.
  
  Narcissa: Here's a nice empty canvas. Until that pile of...typing called HBP came out, many people felt she wasn't as bad as Lucius. Most wrote her as being the unwilling accomplice. I've written her both ways, myself, but here, she is very much a Death Eater. Her only conflict is that she wants to protect her spawn...an understandable reaction, after all.
  
  Draco's mission: Basically, yes.
  
  Thanks for a wonderful review.
  
  Alorkin

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  (#) slickrcbd 2010-12-28

  There seems to be a disconnect between this chapter and the last, yet you have a timestamp of only one day.
  
  You had Dumbledore having some legitimate concerns that if the DMLE found out that Draco was in the hospital, they would arrest him. Then you end the last chapter with it being front page news. Shouldn't the DMLE have followed up on that as Dumbledore feared?
  
  Yet you open in the next chapter with Draco being caught red-handed with one of the most blatant abuses of his prefect status and Minerva being powerless to strip him of his prefect status. I'm wondering when he got out of the hospital.
  
  The rest of the chapter was good, and I found the scene where Hermione was talking about the honey to be hilarious.

  Author's response

  The last chapter was from the 1st to the 14th, this one from the 15th to the 28th.
  
  Draco has his 'adventure' with the healers at St.Mungo's on the morning of Feb 1st. Bones is notified immediately. Since Draco is 'small potatoes', instead of inviting determined resistance from the socially entrenched purists, she sends Rita to embarrass him, and coincidentally, Dumbledore. He's returned safely to the castle within a few hours.
  
  Since Lucy is being hunted, and Narcissa a social pariah, they can do nothing.
  
  Dumbledore discovers Draco's situation before breakfast on the second and it's confirmed by The Prophet that morning. He works from the shadows, so anything he says will be misquoted and undoubtedly make him look stupid(er).
  
  This chapter, Draco plays dictator and has his 'close encounter of the worst kind', on the 15th.
  
  Unfortunately Dumbledore is protecting Draco from the consequences of his actions.(Pretty much as he did in canon.)
  
  Thanks for the kind words, and as for Hermione...Loose lips and all.(see my reply to Teresa's review.)
  
  Alorkin

• JEDI POTTER

  (#) Richardc269 2010-12-28

  Loved the new chapter.
  
  Have you ever really thought about posting this on FFN? I don't think they'll have a problem with this there, I've seen stories riddled with a lot of sex, and they're still on the site. Plus FFN I think is better than Ficwad, seeing as the owners don't ignore their website like this one does.
  
  I love that Dumbledore's back-up plan with Neville is gonna fail, and he doesn't know it yet. Lovely. I love how you make Dumbledore the "evil guy" underneath his grandfather persona, but in all honesty, I don't see him as a "stupid" leader like Voldemort was in Canon. I see him more as a Master Manipulator with his "I'm a Light-Sided leader with a secret Dark Side" as he was in Canon; he was also pretty smart in Canon, too. To an extent, anyway. He's more of a "All talk than do anything" type of person. Or if he does do anything, it's kinda late into the game, just as Voldemort's forces are leaving the area.
  
  I remember you saying you had a nasty surprise for Snape in the end. I'd say instead of killing him, he should suffer in a muggle prison somewhere, with charms placed on him so if the prisoners beat the shit out of him, he won't die. That'd be fun.
  
  Loving the story so far, I hope you update soon.

  Author's response

  I have thought of posting on FF.n, and likely will in the near future.
  Quite honestly, I haven't had any real problems with FicWad, though I do admit, FF.n would get me a larger audience base.
  
  The Longbottoms: Yeah, so far, I've got Harry two steps ahead of Dumbledore, and about he same for Voldemort. The funny part here is that they both think they're the smartest people on Earth, and at this point they are both convinced that their failures are mere luck. Dumbledore is figuring it out faster than Voldemort, but he'll work it out soon.
  
  Voldemort in canon, was, until book six, Rube Goldberg's idiot cousin. Hie plans were so convoluted and he never considered having a backup plan.
  
  Dumbledore in general: He's definitely not stupid. In fact, he is a borderline genius, and I've tried to keep him as close to his canon persona as possible...all the while having him descend into madness.
  
  Quite honestly, I see Dumbledore as evil as Himmler or Pinochet. What I mean, is that he is willing to sacrifice anybody and everybody around him...including and especially Harry and his friends, simply to keep himself in control of his personal fiefdom, and call it 'the greater good'.
  
  His actions in canon, started out less than benign, but by the end of book one, I saw him as anything but. His reason for leaving Harry with his relatives is so he won't develop a big head...that's what he told Minerva.
  
  But...
  
  Throughout the series, he has kept vital information from Harry that would have at least assisted him in his quest. Specific notes should be end of book one in the hospital wig, when he refused to tell Harry why a psychotic killer was after him, in book two when he refused to tell Harry about the possibility of Voldemort giving him more than a scar, In book three when he refused to tell the truth about Sirius, a truth that he, as either head of or a member of the Wizengamot, knew or should have known, book four when he allowed Harry to participate in a deadly contest on the flimsiest of excuses, in Book five when he refused to even look at harry in order to protect himself from Voldemort, coincidentally sacrificing Harry to Voldemort's depredations and Umbridge's torments,
  in book six when he again refused to explain anything to Harry at a time he desperately needed to know and the 'lssons'; were basically psychobabble that seemed to em more intended to get Harry to associate and sympathize wiht Riddle...not destroy him.
  
  Finally in book seven he left them nothing but silly riddles. It was only after Harry had died that he gave him even the barest of information and that was basically crowing about how wonderful and smart he was.
  
  More, in book five, he told Harry that he meant for him to suffer. “Harry, five years ago, when you arrived at Hogwarts, safe and whole as I had planned and intended…well not quite whole. I knew you had suffered. When I placed you on your aunt’s doorstep, I knew I was condemning you to ten dark and difficult years.”
  
  In the time he was in Durzkaban, Dumbledore never once checked up on him, as any decent guardian would. The references in canon, throwing frypans, sanctioned, 'Harry Hunting', beatings both at the hands of his uncle and his cousin, near starvation, certainly malnutrition, chores wholly unsuitable to a child of his age, locking a child into a cupboard under the stairs for days on end, forcing him to sleep in that cupboard when there was a perfectly serviceable bedroom upstairs being used to store junk? Vernon's attempt to kill Harry outside the window of number four. No. Such abusive people should never, ever be allowed to care for children.
  
  I believe Dumbledore knew about the abuse and he either ignored it or facilitated it. When Harry calls him on it, he goes into his 'I am always right and you'll understand it when you grow some brains.'
  
  If it doesn't go the way it should and there's no sweeping it under the rug, he sighs and says 'I'm just an old man, who makes mistakes...forgive me." As you said, he was a master manipulator.
  
  Having grown up abused until I escaped, I am a bit more sensitive to such abuse than most and I easily saw the references to that abuse in the first book. Before she died, my sister called it 'comic abuse', but I saw nothing funny about it at all.
  
  My version of Dumbledore is somewhat less contained, but having so many serious blows land on him in such a short time, would explain that. He knkows that his plans are going down the toilet and there's nothing he can do to stop them. Since he planned for Harry to willingly walk to his death (Canon) everything he has done for the past fifteen years is based on that.
  
  Now, Harry has slipped his lead and Dumbledore is trying desperately to get him back under his direct control.
  
  And I agree with you. Dumbledore loves having his secrets, but never uses them, and never tells his people things that might save lives until it's far too late. His thoughts of 'we cannot sink to their level' and 'oh they must be redeemed' are ludicrous, and in a war time situation, disastrous.
  
  Snape: Putting him in population would result in too many problems. Prisoners really don't like rapists and Snape is definitely a rapist...at the very least. His not dying from the 'accidents' he experiences in a muggle prison, would be far too difficult to explain away, and might even garner him some weird respect from the other prisoners. Plus, there's the chance he might escape or be released.
  
  Don't worry, I have a perfect punishment set up for Snape. He will not die a quick painless death. Not by a long shot. His punishment will be humiliating and painful...and for the rest of his life.
  
  I'll update as soon as I can.
  
  Alorkin

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