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Whispers of Remorse Ch 1
4 reviewsSilver Baloney Trilogy the Third is just your average Chicago girl. She has a best called Bob. He is sad when her ugly, mean parents make her move to New Jersey. Who could even guess who she meats ...
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Whispers of Remorse Ch 1
(#) TheSoundNA 2011-01-01
Wow. /God/... Just... Wow. Honey, I know you must've worked really hard on this, but... Elipses (the '...'), there's only three of them. Ever. No dramatic pauses. Use real grammar, not text talk, ever. 'Sexily' is not a proper adjective, I believe, as well.
I'm not trying to be mean (Being mean is not in my nature, but unfortunately, I am a grammar Nazi, meaning I protect the sanctity of the English language), I'm trying to help. Honestly.
Do you have an editor? If not, contact me. I'd be happy to help you.
xoxoTSNA
(ps, the generally accepted eye colors of the world are: brown, blue, blue gray, gray, or some variation of hazel. Hazel is about the closest you can get to 'yellow' eyes, which, unless you are wearing colored contacts, is generally accepted as physically impossible. Just a heads up.)Whispers of Remorse Ch 1
(#) TheSoundNA 2011-01-01
Forget it. I went back, reread it, and decided that this is hopeless. It sucks.
Oh guess what? I lied. I'm NOT. A naturally nice person, but I try.
But this, THIS isn't even fucking worth it.
I would say I'm sorry, but no, I'm not.
Thank you for wasting three minutes of my life that I can NEVER get back. Have a fucking PEACHY day, why don't you?
TSNAAuthor's response
Thank you for commenting on the steaming pile of shit that is 'Whispers of Remorse'. The story is just an experiment to determine whether it's possible to get a bad review on this site as most of the drivel that is posted here have good reviews. Thank you for proving us correct, and sorry for wasting your time.Whispers of Remorse Ch 1
(#) TheSoundNA 2011-01-01
Oh god. I thought I'd never be so thankful to see a troll (or something of the like) laughs Im happy I was able to help.
xoxoTSNAWhispers of Remorse Ch 1
(#) birthdaymassacre 2011-01-02
Holy fuck ur a total bitch the soundna. What did you eat this morning a fucking hemping bowl of bitchyos god damn you. And this is such a freaking weiredest(in a good way) and awasomest story I've read in monthes. You don't have to be so fucking rude when it someones frist story.
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