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Riley stood, with her chest being crushed against the barricade, waiting for the show to start. The lights dimmed and the entire room filled with screams. Gerard walked on stage and stood there, wi...
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Babe I'll Be Your Outcast
(#) Nightstars 2011-07-09
Aww, this was such a sweet chapter with Lissa at the end. I can't wait for another update.Babe I'll Be Your Outcast
(#) ChloesGreenDay 2011-07-09
Duuuuuude. I like this. I don't know fucking why, because there's a lot of errors, but i like it. Yeah, the Grammar's bad, so is the puntuation and spelling, the storyline is unrealistic, corny and it's near impossible to read because of the lack of paragraphs. BUT. I like your writing style. You have a nice use of discriptive vocab buried under the errors.
I really REALLY want this to be great. I'm a beta reader (editor) for about 4 other people, would you consider me being a beta reader for this? I wouldn't be changing the story, just fixing the errors. Just consider it, yeah? If you want my services, contact me at thechloeevans@hotmail.co.uk. Peace.
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