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Ruby Thoughts
(#) JesusKetchum31 2006-06-11
Wow... I'm amazed. That whole thing is so sad. It really makes you think about the kind of world Pokemon trainers live in. I really like the style you used, but I thought your narration on May's chapter was a little weak. Still though, good job!Author's response
Yeah, I definitely agree that it was weak. Unlike Norman and the Unnamed Mother, I can't seem to get into May's head. I have no idea what a ten year old girl might be thinking when confronted with a famous father basically rejecting her and by extension her dreams. It also didn't help that I played that section of the game over a year ago -.-'.
Anyway, thank you very much for your review.Ruby Thoughts
(#) Silentstream 2006-06-15
Hiya! This was awesome! I've only played pokemon yellow, but I was still able to guess what had gone on from what you wrote. I could really relate to the theme of May growing up when her father wasn't around - not from personal experience. : )Author's response
Yarb! -- what are you doing here?
Acutally, I kind of felt that May's part of the story was weak. I could do the parents well enough, but I couldn't get into her head at all.
Anyway, thanks for the review. This isn't the story with the nice regular reveiwer that I have on "Made of Stone" however. You should really read the reviews on that some time. The flame is expecially amusing.Ruby Thoughts
(#) facia 2007-04-08
I think the strongest chapter emotionally was the first (it's always the mothers that have to sit out the game), but for resonance with the way everything works out, the third chapter is strongest because you can sort of see the future laid out in front of them, and the description of her pokemon up with her was great. The May chapter I think might have been stronger if there had been more of the disconnect/loss of the other chapters. She just sounds kind of annoyed at the delay, and there isn't much on how she views him or even reaction on how he's viewing her. It's an interesting chapter as itself but kind of the weak link in the trio of chapters.Ruby Thoughts
(#) Faeriegirl 2007-05-12
I love it when people write things from different perspectives, and this was escpecially good. I see what everyone says about the May chapter, but it did still make some sense, I mean, she bareley knows this guy, even if he is her father, and she's ten, so she isn't really old enough to understand she should be upset about that. But, yea, it's your story so it's your opinion that counts XDRuby Thoughts
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2009-07-30
I'm really glad you decided to write this, because this is one of the things that most bothered me about Ruby/Sapphire as games. Then again, I suppose Ash's dad left to become a great trainer as well. Weird convention to have in these games, isn't it? Norman is a real scumbag, and I'll definitely be showing that when I write him in my story. Thanks for this.
Hope you get over your Made of Stone writer's block soon.
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