(#) KobraBlaze 2012-01-08So sad. But I really really enjoyed it. I love how you put some dialogue in it which lead into a paragraph of either Frank or Gerards point of view sort of thing. Its so sweet! Keep it up. Your style of writing is so fantastic
Author's responseThank you very much; I'm really happy that you liked it! I wasn't at all sure about the whole dialogue and switching POV thing, I was worried that it just seemed stupid so it's really good to know that you liked that side of things.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a nice review! :)
(#) GallonsOfBlood 2012-01-08It took me a while at first, but then I got the gist of the pov switch between every flashback, and it is a very clever way of writing it.
What I also love, though I don't think it's intended, is that a lot of your work can be used as different parts of this one big universe you've created. It's probably not supposed to be that way, but that's how I see it. This one doesn't fit in with that so much, but a lot of your others do.
This was amazing though. In your other stories I've been too captivated by excitement and shock of what might happen next to get emotional, but in this one I seriously teared up at the end.
Author's responseI was worried that the whole POV thing would kinda kill this, so it's a real relief to hear that you think it was a clever way of doing it.
Your 'universe' theory is really quite interesting for me to hear/read. I've never really thought of it like that before, but now that you mention it I can deffinitely see what you mean with some of my stories. Thanks for sharing that idea; it's really quite a cool way of looking at things.
Thank you very much; I'm really pleased that you think this story went alright! Sorry that it made you tear up, though.
Thank you soooo much for taking the time to review! :)
(#) tortillachip 2012-01-08This is great!! At first I was a little confused, but then it hit me that it switched from Gerard to Frank. It took me a while, but that's just because I can be a bit dumb sometimes. Anyway, I really liked that you did the switching. It was a clever idea. I've only read one where the point of view was switched like every few sentences. It was sort of annoying. I think the way you did it was really creative. I liked that they would say something about Mikey and then have a memory about it. It was very original and very well executed. I've never seen anything like it before. I liked the idea for this because I always like to see how other people would write Frank's reaction to Mikey's death. When it's just Gerard he either cries a little and gets over it, cries a lot and falls into a deep depression, or kills himself. You don't really see Frank's reaction, so I'm really glad to have seen that. I also liked that Gerard didn't do any of those things in this. I've read too many like that. I really liked the way you've written both of their point of views. It showed how they each felt about Mikey, and how their feelings were similar and different. The way they talked to Mikey in their memories and the way they thought about him were written in such a way that you could tell the difference. They weren't so similar to the point where you're like "Wait. Is this Gerard or Frank?" and it's not so different where it doesn't work with the story. I think they were written really well. I also liked the funeral scene. This is a oneshot, and I think that you very clearly showed how much Frank loves Mikey. Sometimes it can be difficult to get across important details, but I think you did this very well. I really loved this. Wonderful job.
Author's responseThank you very much; I'm soooo very pleased that you think this is alright! Sorry that it was confusing in the beginning, that was kinda what I was worried about with this.
I'm relieved that you liked the switching, it felt like a risk so it's really good to know that you thought I did it alright and not annoying as I had feared. I have a bit of an obsession at the moment with the idea of sad Mikey stories and I normally either do Frikeys or brotherly things, so I really wanted to combine the two to show how something like Mikey's suicide affected them both. I wanted them to be different people, but kind of simillar in the ways that they cared about Mikey.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a kind and detailed review; it really does motivate me to write! :)
- Lol This is awesome! But I kinda laughed at the end because they're doing the exact opposite of what Mikey had asked them to do. But altogether this is sad, and moving.
Author's responseThank you very much; I'm glad that you think this went alright!
I'm pleased that it made you laugh, it wasn't realy meant to but I'm glad that it did. The last little bit (Mikey's nite) was meant to be kinda ironic, so I'm glad that you picked up on that.
Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)
(#) TheDisenchanter91080 2012-01-08These kind of stories make me cry...I low them so much though. This was really good! I give it like a million stars out of ten! I love these kind of stories they are like so sad yet like so cute. I love all of your stories they are amazing!
Author's responseSorry that it made to cry!
Thank you very much, I'm really glad that you think this went alright! I was worried that it was boring/didn't make any sense so to hear that you liked it really is very encouraging!
Thanks for taking the time to review! :)
(#) snake56tongue 2012-01-09Okay,
If I were to try and put into words the emotions I felt while reading this, I would end sounding like a complete and utter idiot, so I don't think I am going to try.
Basically, I loved it.
I love how you use so many feelings and depth in all your stories, but it's never repetitive :)
I have an idea!! You see tortillachip 's review?? Well, just read that again, and you will get a rough idea of how I feel about this :)
Author's responseThank you very much; I'm sooooo glad that you liked this! I was kinda worried that this sounded stupid and didn't really work, so to hear that you liked it really does mean a lot!
Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)
(#) CatscanFlyy 2012-01-09This was so beautiful! I admit the pov switch confused me at first but once I stopped being an idiot and realised I hadn't clicked on some waycest my mistake I completely loved this! It was so well written and sad and the dialog a place I feel so many fail was so real you could really see the boys saying the things they did. I love all your writing and this was no exeption!
Author's responseSorry that it was confusing, I was worried that it made no sense whatsoever so I'm really sorry that it was a bit confusing. That taken into consideration I can see why you may have mistaken the beginning for a Waycest!
Thank you very much; I'm really, really glad that you liked this despite the confusing start! Dialogue definitely isn't my strongest point so to hear that you think it sounded realistic really does mean a lot to me!
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a kind review; you've made me smile! :)
(#) Brooke_Linn 2012-01-10I honestly cried. That was so beautiful. Poor Gerard... Poor Frankie.... Poor Mikey... THe whole thing. All of them.
That poor Frankie kid couldn’t hold it together at the funeral, just started screaming and yelling about how it’s not fair that he has to be alone again.
That broke my heart.... That was perfect. I loved the POV, i understood it immediatly. It was very unique. All around amazing job.
Author's responseI'm really sorry that it made you cry!
I'm relieved that you understood the POV changes, I was really worried that it made no sense whatsoever.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a lovely review! :)
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