(#) whatareyouevensaying 2006-07-21I liked your solution to Voldemort's attack, but I think it's safe to say that all of your readers did. One thing I didn't like was the direction of Lucius' conversation with Sirius. They were talking about taking Muggle-borns away from their homes and Sirius wasn't making any objections...seems pretty twisted and unfair to me, but I s'pose Sirius just doesn't bother fighting with Lucius on every point.
Author's responseSirius is very confused aobut his feelings for the Muggle world, and also thinks its better for Lucius to press to take Muggle children away from Muggles than to kill them all.
- Oh dear! This may be the chapter I point to later on when I'm asked "when did Harry's Second Chance" "jump the shark"? If you understand the reference.
Yeah, Rorschach's stories are funny in spots, amusing in others, but they're not SERIOUS stories; they're parodies, farces, comedies. I could never get the same satisfaction out of a Rorschach story that I could out of a 'real' story.
Okay, the idea of a pint-sized 9-year-old Harry ordering Dumbledore and the others around is a bit far-fetched, but you'd written it so it seemed reasonable, possible, I was quite happy to believe it all. But this bit of slapstick comedy ... well, it could have still happened, I grant you, but ugh ... and then you mention Rorschach, so I know the comedy was what you were after ... or what you've seen in his own stories.
I hope your relocation is proceeding smoothly!
- You write: "a pair of wild dementors which where still sticking with him." You mean "...which were still...."
Also, I think the nasty werewolf is called "Greyback" in the American editions, not "Grayback".
Congratulations on your new job, wherever it is. At least, I hope that the move is because you have found some nice position in a History department where you'll have a bit of time to work on your research. (The fact that you're moving in August is evidence supporting this hypothesis.)
- I diagree with brad's opinion that this story "jumped the shark" with the bird/plane/Voldemort chapter.
This chapter has a lot of the Dr. T magic, and I don't see it as derivative. One of the major themes of the story so far has been that the Wizarding world needs to have better appreciation and respect for the Muggle world. The portkeying onto an airplane wing certainly demonstrates that point, dramatically.
Another way in which the story maintains much of the Dr. T magic is the careful description of features that a less serious story would skip over. Here, Dr. T is once again providing details that a mere humor piece would never cover. The careful discussion of the Sirius/Lucius co-operation is a good example of this. Also, Dr. T shows good creativity in attributing a strong motive to Sirius's attempt to kill Snape.
Dr. T, you write: "it would take decades before the book was successfully renounced." Unless the author himself renounces the book, it can't really be "renounced", can it? I think there's a good word that would do it; the best alternatives I can come up with is "before the book's arguments were successfully refuted", or repudiated.
Dr. T., you also write: "as if he could care less". You usually have your stories' narration avoid solecisms, so I assume you meant "as if he couldn't care less".
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