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Chapter 50: Trouble in Sand and The Pack: Part IV
Naruto is given a scroll containing the secrets of making women fall for him, a scroll he uses at first on the women around him but soon on the shinobi world as a whole, giving birth to the Eroninja.
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Eroninja
(#) TheNiemand 2013-12-28
Seriousely First Tsume than Tsunami and Mito, than Kushina and Mikoto in prozess also Yoshino hinted, and now Karura. Seriousely you need just now Sakuras and Inos mother and and Natsumi then you have the whole incest and mother pack here in your fic. Dont know if you want to add Kabutos surgeron mother I forgot her name.
And not to forget Hanabi but she is also in prozess/hinted. Only one not in prozess and not hinted is Choujis mother but I am not sure if you would add here or not cause she is no ninja and have no daughter bound to Naruto.
So if you would add Also Mebuki, Karura, Inos mother, Kushina, Mikoto, Natsumi ,Kabutos Mother and Choujis Mother you would complete the Mother set here and adding Hanabi would complete the incest part of your story.
Did I miss anyone?Eroninja
(#) Batros940 2013-12-29
Good way to end the arc without having Naruto becoming a missing nin. But I'm surprised how you have Kiba and Kiyomi letting the taki nin go. Since it looks like your scraping the idea of Kiba having a harem, hopefully this is the last we see of them. Please keep up the good work I can't wait to see how you resolve Naruto and Anko's problems.Eroninja
(#) Thanathos 2013-12-29
This was a pretty interesting arc, I really enjoyed it all and am happy that things ended well.
Only one thing that bothers me a bit, for some reason you started referring to the Edo Tensei as Endo Tensei more and more often. It's not everywhere, but it pops up more and more often.Author's response
Thanks for catching that. Not sure why I did it.
Glad you enjoyed the arc.Eroninja
(#) niala 2014-01-01
Another great chapter, you are really the best author of Naruto stories.
My suggests for Suna girls:
- Néfertari Vivi (One Piece)
- Eclair (Fairy Tail Movie)
- Penelo (Final Fantasy XII)
- Rikku (Final Fantasy X, X-2)
- Selphie (Final Fantasy VIII)
- Cissnei (Final Fantasy VII Crisis Core)
I looking forward to a Mother set orgy.
Eroninja
(#) Knights991 2014-01-06
You are a god among men my friend. I'm curious, are you ever going to go back to Shion and or Amaru? I now you touched up on them but chose not to add them to Naruto's harem but do you have any plans for them in the future? Also with Ryƫzetsu, it would be cool to see the movie girls get some love besides Sara and her daughter which you said are coming up. So glad I find your stories and I hope you keep doing what you're doing. Much love.Eroninja
(#) Akuma-Heika 2014-01-07
Another child? Has he married Mito already? From memory she was his fiancé until sometime after the founding of Konoha.
Edo Tensei not Endo. You got it right everywhere else so I am assuming typo. Typo happened twice.
How would a seal transfer like a virus from mere contact several times over?
Considering Tsunade luck at gambling it wouldn’t surprise me that Mito is bad as well lol.
The spinning musketballs would work better as shells. As a sphere the drilling effect is almost completely lost.
Why was the Sandaime surprised? What were his reasons? Somewhat explained.
Someone is a fan of BLEACH lol. Cannot remember his name. He is the third seat of squad eleven though.
Instead of via using wind chakra I think removing the using would make the sentence better…at the same time I do not believe it is a very big grammatical issue either way.
Kiri? Who taught Naruto; was it Haku?
Why would the Sage Wind Chakra cause an implosion from the clones death? If it was alive than that would make some sense, but the wind chakra would have no overriding will directing it in order to be compressed. In all likelihood the laws of physics suggest that it would explode.
How did Mito pick the Shinigami’s lock without the key?
Did Mito’s sacrifice show up when she was revived? I cannot see any mention of it but you have written in ch50 that both her and Haku’s sacrifice was also revived (Kin in Haku’s case).
Should Shizune have not used the name Shukaku? They are in another village and even in their own they would have to be careful of using her name in connection with Shukaku.
How were there multiple sand users? Then again they have the magnetic user and gold user. The sand thing with Karura is new though.
Why would the Raikage need time to prepare what he has known for at least a few months if not a few years?
By the way not boy the way. Funny typos lol.
Sorry this took so long. Thanksfor the chapter! Onto ch51!
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