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Chapter 50: Trouble in Sand and The Pack: Part IV
Naruto is given a scroll containing the secrets of making women fall for him, a scroll he uses at first on the women around him but soon on the shinobi world as a whole, giving birth to the Eroninja.
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Eroninja
(#) JadenErius 2013-12-24
First time posting a review for ur chapters! I've been reading your stories for the past few months and I can say I absolutely love it! It is amazing how you can take effectively the same good old characters and use them to tell a story so different yet manage to strike keypoints in the Narutoverse so well.
I love the general theme and feel of the stories as it just makes a person feel damn good about life and the world in general. Odd statement I know.
Was so excited when this one popped up! Cant wait to read your new upcoming chapters!Eroninja
(#) jupmod 2013-12-24
So Yukata joins the Harem. Very fitting to have Naruto get the last known Suna kunoichi in the series. I'm sure now that Yukata is a member, Matsuri would have so much fun having her friend join her and Naruto in a hot threeway. Or better still, have Naruto in a hot gangbang with all his Suna ladies. :D
Toka now? Honestly, I think you're going a bit too far with all these 'dead' girls coming back to life so Naruto can fuck them. IMO, you should get back to Naruto's quest to unite the villages, thus he should be 'seducing' other important women, like Mei Terumi or other female daimyos. It has been a long time since he had added any important women to his Harem that can truly help with his plans.
Anyway, I enjoyed this chapter, and it was a fitting end to this arc. :)Eroninja
(#) n0mster 2013-12-24
Another amazing chapter, it's definitely nice to have an early Christmas present, haha. Anyway, it was great to see a resolution to the Suna/Gaara conflict, though obviously the underlying problem with the respective Daimyo continues to lurk.
The romantic issues between Gaara and Sari were also resolved nicely, they both had understandable problems with their relationship and this recent arc has highlighted this and allowed them to move past it once it's been made obvious to them that the other is more important to them than their own insecurities.
I also liked how Temari's feelings for Naruto have been reaffirmed and made stronger by his actions due to Gaara's imprisonment and slated execution. Fortunately Naruto acted as he did else Temari and Kankuro would've died quite ignominiously due to to Senjumaru's preparations.
Senjumaru's battle prowess were also displayed to quite intriguing lengths this chapter, her ability to control even more than 30 puppets simultaneously was an impressive feat and it appears that her own personality and beliefs are nowhere near as irredeemable as the corrupt politician that she was slated with protecting. She still owes her loyalty to the Wind Daimyo, but it's obvious based on her professed thoughts that this is more based on her wish to be controlled by the fewest number of 'puppeteers' than anything. Given Naruto's own beliefs and ambitions, I'm sure she'll find him even more attractive in the future, especially since being part of his harem would extremely in-line with her own wishes.
It's also intriguing to see that Kabuto had in fact engineered the recent debacle with Gaara and Joseki's assassination on his own. Even though the Wind Daimyo did in fact work to undermine Gaara's leadership and the relationship between Suna and Konoha, it was Kabuto who managed to inflame the situation to significantly greater extent.
The battle between the resurrected Kazekages and Gaara/Naruto (I noted there was at least one instance where you accidentally called them Hokage) was enthralling. There's not much known about the 1st and 2nd Kazekage, but your rendition of them and their abilities was certainly interesting. The Kazekage that stood out the most was of course the Sandaime, with his history and flashback together with Hiruzen. Your fleshing out on the circumstances surrounding the treaty between Konoha and Suna which eventually led up to the Suna alliance with Oto and culminating in their strike against Konoha, was in fact based on a joint belief and hope that the one aspect of their treaty, the joint Chunin Exams would hopefully lead to interactions between the 'opposing' ninja and eventually friendship. The Sandaime's realisation that his and Hiruzen's hopes had in fact been realized in the opponents before him was extremely heartwarming and satisfying, especially when this was reflected in the Edo Tensei failing in him.
Another significant event in their fight was the Yondaime Kazekage also realizing his error and finally professing to Gaara the truth regarding his mother and uncle, which was another resolution to something that had surely been nagging at Gaara his whole life. That the battle also ended with his mother alive has a ton of potential, and of course I'm hoping that with Karura's move to Konoha, she'll be exposed to more Naruto which will eventually lead to her joining his harem and ambition.
Naruto's new skill in his Imploding Shadow Clone no doubt increases his battle potential significantly, as illustrated in its pivotal role in subduing the various Kazekage. I had wondered why Naruto didn't use more of his shadow clones in the battle, and my question was answered when Naruto responded with his new ability.
Yukata's entry into Naruto's harem gives him some greatly needed 'womanpower' in Suna and given the many other Suna Kunoichi who have enjoyed the 'Ghost's' touch, as you said, Naruto will no doubt be able to find many more willing candidates for his harem.
The development between Aeris and Kiba was interesting in that it'll no doubt lead to Aeris's voluntary return to the Inuzuka, thus displaying to Kiba her willingness to start/continue their relationship. I think that Yuffie joining Kiba is becoming more and more implausible and that should it occur, it'll seem rather forced unless the response to her return to Taki is really negative, and only then if Kiba is integral to her surviving Taki's reaction. I also don't think that Kiyomi should re-extend her youthening of the Taki-nin should they return, unless it's a one-time only deal, and it's not permanent youth like Naruto's lovers. This based on her and Naruto's own beliefs regarding immortality; with them already wanting to limit Naruto's lovers ability to procreate and the immortal factor to Naruto's lovers (and certain members of their current family). Then again, Kiba is Tsume's son, and immortality might be extended to him, but I hope not.
I also liked the little hints as to Naruto's future lovers in the omake, I had been wondering when Mei would make an appearance, since she is after all one of the only female Kages ever, and in canon appears to be looking for a suitable mate. It also does give me hope as to the future with Anko, I had hoped that her problem with Naruto would be resolved by now, but I understand that some issues cannot be rushed. Hopefully she won't do anything drastic in the interim and her reconciliation with Naruto won't be a painful one.
As always, looking forward to your next update, they're always something I look forward to, and I understand why you'd want a break from writing after churning out such quality and quantity of chapters. Anyway, have a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year.
Aeris and YuffieEroninja
(#) Real-Steel-Kouryuo 2013-12-24
50 chapters and so far there's no sign of this story slowing down. I have to say that there are some worries I have because most stories, regardless if they are lemon fanfiction or not, tend to stop after this many chapter or even about 20 chapters and some of those stories were definitely awesome in reading.
Those worries are erased when I see this story updated. I only say this because I want it to be known how much I enjoy reading this story and it's not just the love scenes. Considering how the events are playing out for all those involved, especially how you handle the fact of Naruto's ability to fully resurrect those brought back by Edo Tensei. Very intricate and thought-out while most would throw something together that is barely acceptable.
Overall, I know you plan on taking a break for a while but I eagerly await the next update of this awesome and epic story.Eroninja
(#) blackbankai 2013-12-24
now that was a great chapter and temari,kankuro and gaara are reunited with their mother karura.i wonder what will karura,mikoto and kushina talk about when they meet up in konoha.Eroninja
(#) Incandescence 2013-12-26
I'm going to miss these regular updates, think we've been a bit spoiled :P this is already such a long story with such deep character development and interaction a d it's not even finished O_o
the whole kiba thing is a prime example, the whole scene at the end had me almost tearing up, this story always goes the extra mile, rather than having kiba offering her freedom and her deciding to stay in a couple of scenes.
the kyuubi/kiyomi development and the ino thing and the still anko thing, so long and detailed. It's like you're determined to do it properly.
about you having a break, remember it's voluntary so you're under no obligation but what you decide yourself :) keep it fun.
looking forward to toka, is that a madeup character or perhaps from the anime? Not seen the anime for ages :PEroninja
(#) n0mster 2013-12-26
Ohh and regarding potential Suna Kunoichi for Naruto's harem, I'd suggest Nefertari Vivi from One Piece, since she's from a Desert Country and is a pretty interesting character. Along the same thread, I'd add a few of the other One Piece characters who come from the same arc, such as the Broque Works ladies (Miss Valentine and Miss DoubleFinger) who all are powerful fighters.
This led me to thinking about what attributes/abilities potential Suna Kunoichi should have and one which stood out the most was their wind element predisposition, so characters such as Fuuko from Flame of Recca, Kazehana from Sekirei, Tabitha from Zero no Tsukaima and aged-Wendy from Fairy Tail. Also, thinking of Sekirei, there are also other wind users like Yomi, in addition to cloth-users like Uzume (with abilities similar to Maki).
If you want to bring in more puppet-users, there are the many characters of Unbreakable Machine Doll, which includes a female puppet, Yaya, who would make an interesting parallel to Sasori.
If you need more suggestions, I've got tons more, but I'm sure it's already quite difficult to narrow down your choices, haha.Eroninja
(#) bakapervert 2013-12-26
Great chapter. THe fight with all the Kazekages is pretty awesome, I love how you create their personality and their background, interesting personality and quite touching especially the Sandaime. Kabuto's plot here is also pretty unexpected and very worthy as a snake.Eroninja
(#) Mastercappy 2013-12-28
I have to read the whole thing over all 4 chapters to get all that happened here. 2 new harem members, a non Naruto sex sene, Kiba gets in on it all (and a eye full), some plot clean up, and a great fight at the end to boot. Just love it.
There is just to much to say but I will say great work. You pulled a big one off here and it is wort the time to read. And you deserve a beak after this one. Although there some thing hanging out there a good story teller all was keep you guessing. And it is good to see that Anko will but fix.
Keep up the good work.
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