- Awesome so far dude! I'll admit, I'm not much of a Pokémon ran, but I always did like back story fanfics. The dialogue is good and believable, and you describe pretty well. Don't forget to start a new paragraph for every time someone else speaks. Keep up the good work!
Author's responseThank you Leofrost. I will make sure to remember that. If you have any other suggestions let me know and I will try to fix that as well.
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