- Once again, a good chapter. Try to avoid run on sentences and overuse of commas. The choosing scene reminds me of Rangers Apprentice. Sabrina is Alyss, and Cain might be Will. Sable is Horace perhaps, and Maverick is definitely Jenny, just gender switched
Author's responseThank you for the advice. I haven't read the Rangers Apprentice in a while but, I definitely see the similarities between them. This next chapter should be moving away from that direction though. Thank you for all your support. I appreciate it.
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