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One day at the galleria mall the gang were doing there usual stuff . Nickii was slacking as usual and Jonesy was finding a new job as everyday he gets fired . Caitlin was at the lemon . Wyatt was d...
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A day at the mall
(#) Riane46 2006-10-09
Hi, good start, but can you please put spaces, and paragraphes. And... ex:
1: Hi, dude
2: Hi, dudette!
It's just an exampleA day at the mall
(#) country_girl 2008-11-24
I know that this story is a little old but you have to put in spaces so that we can read it and understand it better!
Its a good story, but all you have to do it make sure that not only make it have a little sense to it but also to have a little bit of coma's and periods!
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