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Chapter 1- Dance
2 reviewsKyle has discovered dancing, and Amanda, the love of his life, is there to help him along. But the love he has for her may go too far...
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The Kyle XY and Amanda Chronicles, Part 1: Chapter 1
(#) deanine 2007-04-08
First the positive. You're writing Kyle XY fanfiction!! I've been combing the net for some Kyle XY prose all week. You take the time to write descriptively and I buy your Kyle characterizations. The POV works.
I have a couple of constructive comments for you. First and foremost, in web publishing, if you place a space between each paragraph, your work is much much more readable. Second, you have some word fumbles like conscious where I think you wanted conscience.
Overall, good job. Keep writing.The Kyle XY and Amanda Chronicles, Part 1: Chapter 1
(#) _Amy_Revenge_ 2009-11-08
Grapefruit. Grapefruit.
Reminds me of that hot tub scene with erm.. Josh, I believe, and his "date". Zits and old people, zits and old people.. GRAPEFRUIT!!
Anyway :)
I'm off to read more.
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