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The Bass Files
(#) tragicsin 2006-09-30
You're the only person on this site that can actually write something original! It's not about some cheerleader punk girl, but a real girl, it doesn't revolve around pete wentz, and it involves a bass player! Please update as soon as you can. Good job.Author's response
Original... Um, are you sure you´ve been reading MY story? ;)
Now what does one reply to that kind of comment... "Thank you" seems pretty lame. But that will have to do.
For more, please check out the dedication of chapter 9 "Click here for a free lesson of Greek mythology". Yours, truly.The Bass Files
(#) Ithilwen 2006-10-03
Eyelids is one word.
"either I stayed like this and watched Andy sleep peacefully, with his head on my thighs, or I tried to get up without wakening him"
1. either I "stay" or "could stay" / or I "try" or "could try"
2. without "waking" him, or if you want to be like a fairy tale, without "awakening" him
3. Third option: dump his head onto the floor and go through his stuff.
Hmm... Andy's "a girl who can play an instrument like you can is very sexy to me" sounds rehearsed. It makes him sound insincere. Either Andy's about to pull a "score and scram" or you could stand to make his word choices a little less formal.
"Lay yourself down on the couch."
Why such precise instructions? Again, it sounds like this dude knows exactly what he's doing, like he's done it many times before (and run into problems that necessitated precise instructions). You have a number of options.
1. Andy really is just trying to "get some tail and hit the trail." In this case, you're doing fine.
2. Have Andy just nudge her toward the couch with no verbal cues.
3. Have Andy look over his shoulder toward the bedroom (perhaps worried about Sheena seeing the messy room/obsessive neatness/his My Little Pony collection and deciding that she doesn't want sleep with a guy who's messy/too neat/collects My Little Ponies) and Sheena pulls _him_ toward the couch.
4. Have Andy make a joke, like "If you're going to spend the night, is the couch okay?" and then either have Sheena joke back or just get to the yummy non-poseur lovin'. (This option doesn't work if Andy's not supposed to be good with words.)
5. Leave it as it is. Not everyone's going to fuss about this detail.
And on the mythology chapter! I do hope someone successfully completes a classical hero cycle, at least in a metaphorical sense.The Bass Files
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-10-17
fucking finally. seriously. the sexual tension was giving me a headacheThe Bass Files
(#) Frenchie189 2006-10-22
AHH! I'm totally in love with your story... It's great!Author's response
Yeah, usually violence has that effect on me too. Thank you! :)The Bass Files
(#) isuckatlifen 2006-12-16
umm what can i say yay! i love andy and not alot of storys about him so now im happyAuthor's response
WOW.
You've surely been catching up on a lot of my stories/ chapters. That makes ME very happy. So I guess we're even. :)
Thank you ever so much!
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