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Two Harrys
When would be one of the worst points in time for an over-powered Harry to return to his past? During the Trial before the Wizengamot! Time-traveling Harry reworks Year 5. Harry/Hermione/Luna/Padma
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Re-Ordered
(#) jbstarnes1 2006-10-23
In your work there often seems to be an over-affinity for numbers and quantification - how much one person is more powerful than another, how much of a percent Hermione is attracted to Ron than Harry, that sort of thing - that is very distancing. It lacks emotion and humanity and involvement. Plot points tend to come off the same way, as a lists of things that happen rather than events that invovle the characters and the audience together. It's all so cold and impersonal.Re-Ordered
(#) Oldwolf 2006-10-23
A superb first chapter. Very good job introducing the needed elements while still keeping things moving at a decent clip.
Of all of the characters reactions, I think the one that worries me most is Molly's. Harry's in the midst of forgeing his own future and she might try and force Arthur and the rest of the Weasley's to try and make Harry work under Dumbledore.
Also, I liked how you subtly hinted that Albus is not a Light wizard as Harry said he had enough power to open Merlin's vault but that it still wouldn't open for him.Re-Ordered
(#) hehehe 2006-10-23
Most excellent, I like Harry's direct approach against the bullshit of the MinistryRe-Ordered
(#) Dragen 2006-10-25
What a great start to the story, I like the talk between the two Harry's. I like how Harry give everyone a pace of his mind, declared himself to be a warlock... (What is a Warlock?? And what does it mean to your story?)
I love how many Vaults Harry's getting, the ones he owns are the Potter's Gryffindor'and Hufflepuff, but he also own by magic not both Slytherin, Ravenclaw and Merlin... nice. Not many people will like that.
I can't wait to see what happens next.Author's response
Warlocks, in my stories, are wizards who refuse to follow most of the rules and regulations (Percy is sort of the anti-warlock). so, Harry is operating on an older set of rules, which also means he is eligable for no help from the Ministry (not that this would bother Harry, since they've been of no help in any event).
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(#) dogbertcarroll 2006-11-24
"Oh . . . Shit, shite, merde! I was afraid that might happen, because it was about the worst scenario I could come up with."
snicker
Murphy has it in for him.Re-Ordered
(#) Wonderbee31 2007-03-16
Heh, I like this twist on the time-trave story, and look forward to how things go for the Harry's now, and what Albus might do to bring his weapon back under control.Re-Ordered
(#) selenepotter 2009-01-02
I love this story! And since you're not writing as much any more, I'm re-reading it to get my Dr.T fix
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