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Chapter 4 - Rule Breakers7 reviews
C'mon, how long was it going to last......really
(#) duckapple 2006-10-30Oh dear god. Marry me. Now.
Author's responseI do, but I only do Haribo jelly rings so don't bother with any of the white gold platinum crap.
(#) Tawney 2006-10-30Wow...thats was amazing! I seriously love your writing. Ace...god i'm actually struggling for words. Believe me that never happens! XX
Author's responseYeah this is the kinda review that wants to make me write more. I'm pretty much floored by that comment.
(#) LOVELA 2006-10-30Holy Crap! Great chapter. I'm at a loss for words.
Author's responseYour writing does similar things for me....
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-10-30they finally kissed. now the romance can begin! i love how original this story is. patrick being the naughty one? that's perfection in writing.
Author's responseI couldn't help it, he'd just got that shyness about him that you know there's a beast inside....Thanks for the review. I was hoping it isn't too cliche, but I'm trying to pad it out a bit y'know?
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-10-311) “he hat wearing one” -> Fucking ROAR, dude! ;)
2) Ach, the tension in the elevator. I love it when people call him Stump. He probably doesn´t… but who cares, Stump?
3) “superbly executed covert mission” -> superbly executed phrasing. You make me melt with linguistics tricks like that.
4) Ha ha, if there´s one person who picks up on the sex that´s going on it has to be Pete “Nude” Wentz.
5) “scattered the balls gently” -> “YOU JUST HAVE TO RUB IT IN, DONTCHA?!” (That´s Mr. Meatball hissing at you.)
6) Oh, Stump´s got the cutest thoughts. During sex. O_o
7) Powerful last sentence. (Thanks for keeping it in English so I could understand it. ;) )
Author's responseI love your bullet points...ALEX. xxx
(#) patrickdance4me 2006-11-02hehe i loves it a lot. patrick is a little whore haha. ok not really... but... lol never mind this is a really great story can wait to read more.
(#) riaryder 2006-12-13Ah, the tension
Aw, the kissing
Kinda kinky Patrick
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