(#) xxlaurenxx 2006-11-03haha yea, 2 years, lOl
but yea, it's really interesting, this is deffinitly a new side of Pete no one has ever written about before, it's really original and im curious to see where it's going to go, so keep writing and i'll be sure to read the next chapter xD
Author's responseThis is pretty much the darkest stuff I've ever written. But don't worry, the brighter side is gonna shine through. Thank you tons for the review!
poor little vampire boy.
this is a strange fic, but i like it.
its not that same-old-same-old met-someome-from-fall-out-boy-and-now-were-like-friends-forever-even-though-we-just-met ones I always write...continue. pleeeaaaasssseeee
Author's responseEh, I'm not sure if I'm going to continue...I don't know yet. I'll see.
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-12slaps herself in the face Ok, how did THIS escape my attention?!
Wonderful literary quality. You used simple repitition as a powerful writing device. Pete can hardly think about anything else but that he´s been caged up for two years. It´s convincing and believable.
This is a great start. I´m still marveling at your beautifully written chapter. The girl´s got talent. :)
You got me hooked so expect further reviews that will leave you both flattered and happy that there´s an ocean between you and my ODDness. ;)
Author's responseYou just made my day a whole lot better! Thanks for the long review and thank you for the ego-boosting comments. I definitely needed it.
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-12I agree that having this in first person (Pete) and still having her thoughts is a bit weird BUT it´s your story. You´re god. I think I let myself be timidated by the boundaries of "realism" in my own writing so it´s good to see that you´re wiser than me. Also, given her thoughts enables you to draw a more complex picture of this character and that´s always appreciated.
Author's responseThank you once again for the absolutely amazing review. I'm just glad that no one seems to be too weirded out by the first/third person way of thinking.
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