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Chapter One
6 reviewsOK, so I started this awhile ago and I haven't really been working on it a lot, so I'm going to post it here because then I'll feel like I have to work on it and then maybe I'll finally finish it. ...
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Untitled as of right now!
(#) KMidnite 2006-11-03
You know what? You should call its Two Years!!! But thats just a suggestion, I swear!Author's response
Isn't being repetitive fun? But I do seriously need to think of a better title. My mind has put up its "gone fishing" sign.Untitled as of right now!
(#) xxlaurenxx 2006-11-03
haha yea, 2 years, lOl
but yea, it's really interesting, this is deffinitly a new side of Pete no one has ever written about before, it's really original and im curious to see where it's going to go, so keep writing and i'll be sure to read the next chapter xDAuthor's response
This is pretty much the darkest stuff I've ever written. But don't worry, the brighter side is gonna shine through. Thank you tons for the review!Untitled as of right now!
(#) nya-MEya 2006-11-04
nooo!!!
poor little vampire boy.
this is a strange fic, but i like it.
its not that same-old-same-old met-someome-from-fall-out-boy-and-now-were-like-friends-forever-even-though-we-just-met ones I always write...continue. pleeeaaaasssseeee
bambi eyesAuthor's response
Eh, I'm not sure if I'm going to continue...I don't know yet. I'll see.Untitled as of right now!
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-12
slaps herself in the face Ok, how did THIS escape my attention?!
Wonderful literary quality. You used simple repitition as a powerful writing device. Pete can hardly think about anything else but that he´s been caged up for two years. It´s convincing and believable.
This is a great start. I´m still marveling at your beautifully written chapter. The girl´s got talent. :)
You got me hooked so expect further reviews that will leave you both flattered and happy that there´s an ocean between you and my ODDness. ;)Author's response
You just made my day a whole lot better! Thanks for the long review and thank you for the ego-boosting comments. I definitely needed it.Untitled as of right now!
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-12
I agree that having this in first person (Pete) and still having her thoughts is a bit weird BUT it´s your story. You´re god. I think I let myself be timidated by the boundaries of "realism" in my own writing so it´s good to see that you´re wiser than me. Also, given her thoughts enables you to draw a more complex picture of this character and that´s always appreciated.Author's response
Thank you once again for the absolutely amazing review. I'm just glad that no one seems to be too weirded out by the first/third person way of thinking.
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