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I made some changes to this chapter, added some detail and took somethings out of it. Pls re read if you've already read it.
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Is She Writing Fiction?
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-11-11
i think that was a lot of information for one chapter, kind of like you were trying to rush threw the intro and right into the patrick-goodness. i'm excited to see where this is going, but i think you could have spent a little bit more time on developing the characters.
anywho, i always love a patrick story, so i'm gonna expect an update...Is She Writing Fiction?
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-11
First of all, I love the chapter title. It´s sweet and it sticks. Kinda like my favorite bubble gum. Har har.
So yeah, I wouldn´t have pointed out that Bree´s sarcastic and cynical if she doesn´t really say anything sarcastic and cynical. But I get your point so just ignore my bitchiness. :)
Also, the name Bree makes me think of cheese for some reason... Onto the next chappie.Author's response
i actually wasnt thinking of cheese wen i came up wit da name but now u mention it... btw how do u get pix nd dat up on ur profile?Is She Writing Fiction?
(#) whatkatydid 2006-11-14
Fate wears a hate - great line.
he wears it well though, continue!Is She Writing Fiction?
(#) GwenMerlon 2006-12-24
First of all, I know I'm reviewing this part of the story way late in the game, but that's not stopping me this once. I absolutely love Bree. I mean, I know exactly how she feels- when your best friend is suddenly taken over by her boyfriend. I can't even count how many times that has happened to me... Anyway, you did a great job of showing her feelings.
Great name for the chapter by the way. If I had points left then I'd throw one at you. ;)
Onward to the next chapter! Yay!
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