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Sets of Three, They Say...
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-25
I´m not even gonna brag that I am the first to review this chapter filled with goodness because, frankly, it´s not even a challenge anymore. I mean, I can hear Crystal snoring all the way over to Austria and Katy´s hogging my blanket right now... um, nevermind...
I still like this narrator a lot, even though, I must admit, that saying Patrick is NOT the cutest sleeper makes me wonder about their being in touch with reality. ;)
Thank you for the flashback. I think the overall story profits a lot from it.
And, in addition to not being the cutest sleeper, Patrick obviously also doesn´t know when to keep his tasty ass in Meg´s apartment. I think a Sheena quote would come in handy here: "Meet Patrick Stump, everyone. "Musical genius, romantic dimwit."Author's response
i was making him too sappy, and , like crystal said, that's not real. i needed a drama-rama chapter anyway. i thought that was important to any story. man. i JUST got out of bed and i'm not functioning so well.Sets of Three, They Say...
(#) whatkatydid 2006-11-25
Ah! Sarah! Another amazing chapter. The flashback was brilliant and totally necessary. These are vital in explaining why Meg behaves the way she does and why she won't speak. That is so sad but so true of the real life situations ( I know first hand with My sister )
Patrick bowing out is such a realistic character flaw, linking with his lack of confidence. Great writing.
But you know that already right - DoJ got your back sista.
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could i be any more excited about seeing reviews from all of my DoJ sisters....?
i don't really think so. i love you guys for being so faithful to my story...
muchos gracias, senorita...Sets of Three, They Say...
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-11-25
suck it, alex. i don't snore.
anyway, kudos to you for being able to post at 3 o'clock in the morning. that's pretty much amazing.
a couple of things in this chapter that helped make it more realistic and original. (apparently that's your forte, so...) i think the way you wrote in the flashback was very "flowable". pancakes > granola. haha.
okay, and i loved patrick at the end. not like "oh, how sweet" but like "god, that's so imperfectly patrick" so kudos to you for another job well done.
you serve DoJ proud. does that make sense? actually, no...no it doesn't.Author's response
it's all good. i get what you're saying...
do you know how temtped i was to say..she was eating pancakes and granola...
so tempted..Sets of Three, They Say...
(#) patrickdance4me 2006-11-25
aw patrick shouldnt leave. poor meg. update soon please.Sets of Three, They Say...
(#) LOVELA 2006-11-27
I'm like one of the last DOJ girls to review...I'm horrible. BUT, this chapter was wonderfully written!!!! Oh I love the flash back and I love Patrick acting like a dumb ass. I love it all. ALL OF IT!
Una mas chapter to go and then I'm caught up!
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