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Chapter 8 - Take A Writers Block + DoJ = This Chapter.15 reviews
Crystal Crystal Crystal.
(#) jessiearei 2006-11-27wow! your story is amazing! it gives me goosebumps! haha i love it! update again soon!
Author's responseDid the little hairs stand up too?? Cos I loves to do that to people.....I'm kinda specific....
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-11-27mr. nickname freaks me out. i'm not gonna lie.
choice quotable (based strictly on word usage this time):
He reached up and pulled out the hair band keeping her hair in the bun and her curls escaped like un-just prisoners over her shoulders and back. the description of that one action is so powerful that it almost makes me feel like i was on the bus watching them. that didn't come out right, but hopefully you understand what i was getting at with that.
the way you played out the whole chapter was perfect. my mind was trying to formulate how you would do it after our chat, but this...well, it made my imagination seem like a non-animated version of the blow job face.(which we all know doesn't compare to the animated version of the blow job face)
"You're one too...." He said staring at her. ending the chapter like this makes me want to steal your soul. seriously.
thank you for the long update, katy. i love you.
Author's responseThank you for your help Sista, as you can see, I basically summed it up in the summary. If it wasn't for you, we would've been waiting a lot longer for this.
I hope I did it justice.
(#) duckapple 2006-11-27Oh petey pants has special powers. This could end badly. heh.
Author's responsePetey Pants - HA!
(#) LOVELA 2006-11-27In the words of Wayne and Garth.
That was (I've never used this word before, so bear with me) plonkness. (Did I do an ok job?)
Wonderful, supurb and glorious! That's you wrapped into one scumptious dish.
You deserve this: SMOOCHES!!!
Author's responseYou did a wonderful job, as always, covered in sugar and spice and all things nice. I am one tasty dish yo!
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-28Thank you, Crystal, for this breath-taking chapter. Without you, I´d be nothing.
You know the drill…
the cold was a thief. -> That´s just plain beautiful.
He said with the most hideously huge grin smacked on the cocky face of his. -> I SWEAR the word “cocky” was invented for Pete Wentz. (For more than one reason.) The inventors, the DoJ.
Patrick's smile widened, full grin, all teeth, dimples included. -> Hm, that was the best sex I´ve had lately. :)
Pete plonked down his copy of Vanity Fair and eyeballed him. -> Ok, don´t taunt me with if there is no footnote to follow. What is this?!
her curls escaped like un-just prisoners over her shoulders and back. -> Yeah… for my taste, that´s too much. Sorry. Hey, Crystal is actually being nicer than me. But what do I know? I have curls, so that probably doesn´t count. ;)
behavior -> With the missing “u” in here, it´s become obvious to me that Crystal really wrote this chapter. ;)
"You're one too...." He said staring at her. -> OH. MY. GOD. in the style of that bitch from Friends that Chandler used to date
I loved this chapter. Take your goddamn rating point already cos I don´t want it.
P.S.: Also, thank you, Katy. Whatever…
Author's responsedid you just put a 'whatever' in my review???.....you're dead.
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-11-28like... talk to the hand... ;)
Author's responsetalk to my ass (_I_)
(#) x-xJafax-x 2006-11-28Huba ? wa? oh geez !! ur stry is way to breathe takin i'm indeed inlove with this stry can i marry it ?? my last stry is cheatin on me
Author's responseplease send all marriage proposals to email@example.com where all proposers will be fairly considered for the role of my wedded partner.
(#) ZippersOverYou 2006-11-30Oh-my-god. This is amazing. I've been reading this since 10:45 (it's now 2:30) and it's wonderful. What a cliffhanger to end with as well....ooh....please update soon so I may indulge my passion.
(#) MMMramen 2006-12-10GAAAAAAASSSPPPP! Pete's a Track Back-er too?!??!?!? But why him? I mean, if I were a holy being and had to give out special powers, I sure as fuck wouldn't choose Mr. Wentz. I'm so hooked on this story, it's ridiculous.
Author's responsedon't you just hate the jack-ass?
(#) riaryder 2006-12-13WAH!
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