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• The Shallows

  (#) Togot 2005-09-18

  ok about sentence structure, you should start paragraphs with a tab, maybe your computer is like mind and when you copy and paste the story the tabs get erased so I have to mark them and go through it pressing the space bar but right now yours story is one big paragraph and when you have to people speaking you should keep their dialogue in separate paragraphs so people don’t get confused about who is saying what, keep up the progress; I think your getting better.

• The Shallows

  (#) Aura 2007-08-19

  I read the review that "Togot" said and that was what i was going to say, so i'll just say this.
  
  Great way to introduce the characters, you didn't put them right in to the action the second you meet them in the story. which i think is good.
  
  Also the couple sounds cute, hey am a girl, all girls love a little romance.
  
  Peace
  

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