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Red, Green, Black and Cream
5 reviewsSometimes love comes at a price. Sometimes love is simple and unkind. Other times love is complicated and such sweet, sweet misery.
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Loves Punishment
(#) pixied_secrets 2006-11-29
wow.
newbie of the week= you. seriously.
okay, since i'm the first to review (haha, alex and katy suck) i would like to also be the first to say the way you introduced this character is amazing. the set up is amazing. it allows for a descriptive introduction of the character without being too forward, or too vague. it was seemless. honestly.
i am really intrigued with this. your protagonist is obviously hiding something, and i can't wait to find out what it is.
do you watch a lot of crime drama? because this first chapter was very detailed and i think you just may have something with this...Author's response
Ha! It is very amazing to me that you reviewed my story! Wow! I have actually read one of yours and loved it! So...Thank you!Loves Punishment
(#) LOVELA 2006-11-29
Crystal (pixiedsecrets) told me I had to read this story because I would just die. I already am busting to read what happens next. I love crime shows on TV, so reading them makes me just as giddy. And it doesn't hurt that Fall Out Boy is in it too.
You may proceed...Author's response
I have also read on of your stories too! Awesome! I was quite literally in the shower when I thought this up! I love crime dramas as well and when I was younger I read a lot of mystery books. I hope I can deliver what you guys are expecting!Loves Punishment
(#) whatkatydid 2006-11-30
pats herself down.... Woooh! That was hot hot hot. She's a little fox!
Firstly, welcome to the AUTHORative side of Ficwad, your first chapter was amazing. Very very descriptive and accurate. If your intention was to capture the atmosphere then you did a wonderful job. You defined Ariss'a mannerisms perfectly and esnured her character was in harmony which proves to me you have a firm idea of you want her portrayed.
I'm so excited I cannot wait to read the next chappie! So excited
Nice work! Seriously!!
~K
xxxAuthor's response
Wowwie! I did not expect this kind of response! You are all seriously sweet! I just wrote. I had no intentions or goals on how I wanted it recieved! I thought of this in the shower, got out typed it up and posted. It is amazing that it got such good feedback! Thank you! I think I have read a story of yours too! So surreal!Loves Punishment
(#) riaryder 2006-11-30
Superb opening chapter. Brilliant dialogue. I am totally intrigued. You've left me hanging, and that means I'll be watching out for chapter 2.Author's response
I'm glad I have your attention! Thanks for reading and liking it! The next chappie will be posted some time tonight or in the morning! Stay tuned!Loves Punishment
(#) patricksgirl84 2007-03-13
Just found this story. I'm in the process of reading it. So far I love it!Author's response
Aww... New reader. I'm so excited! Enjoy!
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