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Chapter Six: Voice Activated Chills
11 reviewsAva is still trying to deal with the new developments in her life.
5Exciting
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The Mistake
(#) patrickdance4me 2006-12-17
so this is all mysterious and flirtacious. haha. and i love it and am practically begging for more! please, hurry and update!The Mistake
(#) moocow 2006-12-17
i love dirty phone calls.
hahahaAuthor's response
Oh yes, don't we allThe Mistake
(#) whatkatydid 2006-12-17
I rated this exciting because that's how it made me feel to read it, the phone call, the little twist at the end.
I'm usually a sucker for extended reviews but I just can't quite contain myself.
I adore Patrick's insecurities and I loved the fact he was insistant she be there. He's awesome. :)
Write more - and stop stealing my rating points man....Author's response
hmm... but I love rating points!The Mistake
(#) FrostedGlass 2006-12-18
Love how we learn more about Ava’s past (her parents’ death and her consequent depression).
Patrick calling her “honey” and “sweetie”. I wish I was Ava. Goddamnit… ;)
It’s neat to have a parallel like Pete – Patrick & Wendy – Ava. You’re a smart thing, GwenMerlon.
Aaaahhhh… just how you describe Patrick making his voice lower and lower… gave me chills… among other things… yeah, moving right along…
Ava is a wonderful person to me. Because she can never shake off the thought of Wendy, despite Patrick’s… utter PATRICKNESS! How could anyone not like Ava and feel empathy for her? I know I love that girl.
I needed to rate this as “exciting” because 1) Patrick is so yummy and 2) because the suspense of what’s up with Wendy’s biological father is killing me.
Very plonky chapter, Ms. Merlon. :)
P.S.: Katy’s an awesome reviewer. Make sure to please her, she´s a keeper. ;)Author's response
I think we all wish we were Ava (for Patrick anyway). And points to you for seeing the Wendy/Peter Pan thing... It was totaly spur of the moment... and I think you're right about Katy; definately a keeper.The Mistake
(#) FallOutGrl 2006-12-18
omg! girl, i am soooooo hooked on to this!!! honetsly, yours is one of the only stories that acutally gets my heart rate up! Keep writing!The Mistake
(#) Frenchie189 2006-12-18
Oh my god, this story is amazing! I have it on my story alerts. :) I love it. Update soon please.The Mistake
(#) jessiearei 2006-12-18
great update!
tis amazing!
ooh who's pretending to be wendy's father?
hurry up and update!Author's response
Geez, I can't just TELL you who is being her father... that would give SO much away!The Mistake
(#) isuckatlifen 2006-12-20
eww creepy her dads dead? why wouldnt wendy tell the officer. i guess ill have to find outThe Mistake
(#) CoraLiz 2007-01-16
I have a theory about who the killer is, but I'm too scared to say at this point.Author's response
Um, because you KNOW who it is! And if you tell anyone, I swear, little girl, I will KILL you!
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