Re-done Chapter 2! Harry begins to reach out to his various friends and potential allies to divert the prophecy Trelawney made at the end of third year.
- after the first chapter i thought "interesting story idea, lets see where it will be going...", NOW i found myself confused!
i can't rate this story because i don't have an apropiate choice given...while it is ooc, it's fiction so that's normally given...
closest to describing it would be train wreck...BUT only up to now...how is it that after the first chapter, there is such a big leap? harry is suddenly a friend of nott and bullstrode? tutoring for arithmency and runes? while in third year, where the classes only started -even if he didn't took them-? why not help from gryffindors? or logically ravenclaws??
letters to mafalda and the weasleys are good! but why suddenly writing the malfoys???? he and draco have their own history, especially after dementor-look-a-like and hippogriff incidents in third year...harry and lucius had very serious trouble in his second year...heck, lucius let a basilisk loose in hogwarts and now suddenly...poof...all's big friendly and chummy??
i hope desperately that this will clear up in the next chapter!
- You either skipped a few chapters for have posted a chapter from another story here. The two chapters really don't go together as is. You need to explain the HUGE difference between chapter 2 and canon. I'm not saying it can't be done, just not as you've done it. If you explain it in chapter 3, you needed to have posted it along with chapter 2.
- What a great second chpater;
So Gordon is Second cousin of Millie Bulstrode, who would have thought, and he knows a bet about the wizarding world then??
SO... Harry is making friends with the Malfoys, who would have thought, does this mean that Lucius will not rejoin Voldemort or is he going to spy for Harry? I hope Ron and the rest will be ok with this, but I don't think so, speaclly with Ron.
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