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• Made of Stone

  (#) whatareyouevensaying 2007-02-10

  Wow, talk about coming back with a bang! Quite an extraordinary chapter you've got here. I'm going to have to read it again tomorrow to make sure I absorbed it all. Can't wait for more.

  Author's response

  Thanks. I'm getting back into a pokemon mood again after going seventeen bajillion months dabbling around in other fandoms.
  
  I'm not certain what I should do with Bolt though. There are several different possibilities. Stay tuned.

• Made of Stone

  (#) cjonbloodletter 2007-02-11

  Just a question, by explode you don't mean mean he litle bugger is actually gonna pop do you? Because I can just imagine the next lines of the story being: "The rodent poke'mon let out an scream full of pain as the elctricity engulfed him, then suddenly the charge exploded outwards electricity and innards spraying poke'mon and trainers alike in a gor mess"

  Author's response

  Well, explosion does usually mean blast. You try hooking up an American computer in Europe and you'll see what I'm driving at. Bolt currently has about three times as much electricity as he can handle pumping through his system, and pichu are notorious for being unable to control their electricity which would lead people to believe that the darling trainers might be picking bits of fried pichu off the landscape for some time to come. However, my beta is trying to convince me not to do this, so it could go either way.

• Made of Stone

  (#) cjonbloodletter 2007-02-11

  sorry aqbout the pos by the way as i got a new cheap peice of shit keboard tha doesn't allways respond to my fingers. I would also like to request that you put Absol somewhere in your story as he's my favorite poke'mon out of all the games. It's not too unplausable that one would appear in Kanto as they're fairly rare so not much would be known about where to find them.

  Author's response

  I'm afraid there will be no absol character. I love them, but they are strictly Hoenn pokemon, and they are way too over used in pokemon fanfiction. I'm going to try to stick to the "unappreciated" pokemon. However, I could have a few cameos, I suppose, if you really like absol. I do have these conveinient Hoennese Rangers running around after all.

• Made of Stone

  (#) cjonbloodletter 2007-02-13

  Well I can forgive the lack of Absol, throw in a psyduck or one of the funnier poke'mon and I'll be happy.

• Made of Stone

  (#) Camera_Doesnt_Lie 2007-02-19

  Whoa, coming back with a bang--no pun intended. Have I already mentioned that I'm in love with the way you describe battles? Yeah. Think I'm purposely putting off writing one because you set such a high bar.
  
  But, yeah. I'm back, baby!

  Author's response

  CDL, don't put off battles just because of me. You write extremely well, and it's always wonderful to read what you have (me loveth the character interaction that you write). Besides, how can you either know where you are when it comes to writing battles unless you do it? The only way to get better is practie, practice. ^^ - IWCT, waiting for your next installment.

• Made of Stone

  (#) facia 2007-04-08

  It seems like this story should turn out slow paced, but it completely isn't. All the details of the story are completely engaging, both interestingly original and believable at the same time.
  
  And now a pichu blowing up...Normally I'd think it was obvious that there would be no real damage, but from the way you've written the story so far, death seems more likely and appropriate to the way you'd got unintended consequences and seriousness. I'm not quite rooting for the pichu's death (they're cute...) but...

  Author's response

  I actually have two versions of the next chapter, that I'm still trying to decide on using. There is a way out of the predicament that doesn't involve splattering fried pichu all over the landscape, if you think about the general nature of pokemon. The 'Sploded Pichu chapter was more fun to write, just because death, action and gore usually is. However, after the death scene the story would kinda have to realistically stop. Much as I love Mel, and wish that she was resilient against all things, I think discovering the death of not only Bolt, but Matt and Adam (let's face it, with that much electricity in the air and Bolt exploding Adam and Matt are courting death, and most certainly complete paralysis if they survive) would completely traumatize her for life.
  
  The Non-'Sploded Pichu chapter is less fun, as I have to deal with shocked ten year olds, and the angst factor seems contrived. However, if I don't want the story to descend into complete angst for the rest of it (rather than minor angst for a chapter) and ruining forever a little girl's chance to take on the world, I probably should let Bolt survive.
  
  Bottom line, I'm still trying to decide between the two. From my reviewers and beta, so far I've got two votes for letting Bolt survive, and one vote against (this was just based on gut feeling, rather than any attachment to realism on their part). I'm leaning toward using the lop-hole that I left for myself, and letting him live, even though the writing for the survival chapter isn't as entertaining.

• Made of Stone

  (#) Faeriegirl 2007-04-27

  Ok, finally finished reading all the chapters, battling against whatever godawful server ficwad uses, and I LOVE it. Mel is a really good character, and it's nice to have a non-stunning/unusual looking protaganist (GO BROWN HAIRED BROWN EYED PEOPLE!) Couple of things, Chrono is really annoying and very unrealistic, and its slightly worrying that Mel's best friend currently appears to be a hologram, and the fact it can become solid is just unbelievable for me persoanlly. Also, the begining, where you say one thing and then go on to say you actually meant something else was way too wordy and felt a bit like you were trying to be clever but were just being confusing. However as soon as she arrived at the lab things picked right up and I have been completely hooked ever since. I love the character development, (although I hope you meant it to be obvious that the brain damaged dragon whisperer is Alex's dad, or am I jumping the gun? :p) and the little details you put in, like the Joy/Jenny stuff, and the pokemon's individual personalities. Anyway, in short, I adore it and WRITE MORE :)

  Author's response

  Sorry about Ficwad's server, I can't do anything about that, sadly. ^^;
  
  I'm glad that you like Mel. Sometimes I find her just a bit too sweet and understanding. I need to give her some real flaws. I created this fic after reading one too many Mary-Sue'd Original Trainer fics, and I was sick of girls with pale skin raven wing black hair, and red eyes. That kinda showed through a little too much in the first chapter, I'm guessing. As several new comers to MoS have pointed out, the first chapter is awkward (I'd call it pretentious, now that I have almost 2 years distance from it, but at the time I thought I was being oh-so-funny). I really will have to get around to cleaning it up.
  
  I'm sorry that you think Chrono is unrealistic. I'm trying to make him as realistic in personality that an advanced piece of super programing can be. They are all the way up to Porygon Z, now, I would have thought that a hologram like Chrono would have been invented. As for the solid/non-solid thing, my only experience with holograms in fiction comes from "Star Trek: Voyager" were their doctor is capable of doing the solid/non-solid thing. Any abilities or traits that Chrono has will probably be able to be traced back to either 1) Pokedex abilities, 2) Porygon because they're the cannon hologram thing, or 3) The Doctor.
  
  However, if you have any suggestions on how to improve Chrono personality-wise, I'm more than willing to hear them. I have enough trouble keeping Mel and co. in the spirit of ten-year olds (Guess why I made two of them 12, and ensured that Leagues could start until everyone is 11 - 14). I can use all the help that I can get on the pokemon, and extra characters like Chrono.
  
  I also understand your concern about Mel's best friend being basically a piece of machinery. It is a little worrying, but Melamine isn't supposed to be good at social skills. She's not angstily bad at it, but a lot of stuff hasn't quite clicked yet. She's the girl in the class with the pet rock, just remember ^^. She will start getting to know Adam and Matt better, and become closer to the two of them, as well as a few other characters that you've met. This is a growing experience for her.
  
  I do try to establish things like this early on, so you can see the character develop from where they start out (a small girl who loves her sisters to nearly sickening bits, and collects plastic figurines does change over time, we hope) to where they end up. And speaking of establishment. Yet, that was a blatant hint. It's not the entire story, but I wanted to give Alex some background without coming out and just shoving it down everyone's throat. I'll be doing the same for pretty much all the characters if they have any back story to speak of. The problem is it's so much easier to invent really angsty backgrounds and much more fun than writing stable, caring familial relationships. There's a fine line between realism, and interesting narrative extras, and I'm hoping that all of my reviewers are going to whap me across the head if I cross it. I see Chrono's already getting a little too close to that edge. ^^
  
  Anyway, thank you for your suggestions. I should warn you, it's taken me almost 2 years to write this much, and I'm averaging less than a full chapter every two months ^^. I am writing more. Just slowly. Very slowly...
  
  =^.^= IWCT

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