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Chapter 5
10 reviewsPeyton Clarkson's boyfriend had just signed with one of the biggest recording companies around, and now hes heading out to tour with another major band, Fall Out Boy. What happens when he can't alw...
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Falter
(#) GwenMerlon 2007-02-19
Um, can you say AMAZING? Because I certainly can... As well as "leaving one hanging" and "Update soon".
Anyway, the bathroom scene... shiver Wow. I almost died when Patrick told Peyton he didn't like Oliver then went on about fire hazards. That was priceless. Seriously.
And the creepy way Oliver whispered in Peyton's ear about talking later then being all mad in the car. What is up with that? I mean, clearly the guy is crazy, but wow. Talk about a 360. I mean, wasn't it just two chapters ago that I thought Patrick needed to step up his game because Oliver was just too cute?
Anyway, this was AMAZING, you seriously left me hanging and you need to update soon!!! (see, I can say all those words quite well)Author's response
Lol Your reviews make me want to tell you everything that is coming up..but I can't AHHH lol And I had to make you love Oliver before you saw who he really was...he was a really good facade going on..and I like him even more now LOL and I like the way you put in there the Update Soon and stuff..Falter
(#) musicaldreamer 2007-02-20
Awesome chapppie!! More soon pwease!!Author's response
Thank you! That one seemed to flow more easily than the rest. I'm glad you liked it.Falter
(#) riaryder 2007-02-21
Oh lady! Dun dun dun!
The suspense is killing me.
There are a million things I love about this story.
Oliver is such a dark horse. I love how you made me think he was really special, then threw in this deep dark and quite frankly crazy side of him. Super good work.
Peyton seemed like your usual head turned by fame kind of girl, but now we see there's so much more to her. Putting up with whatever shit Oliver's been throwing her. I am growing very fond of her.
Your Patrick is just SO right.Sweet, caring and sexy. And that bathroom scene was HOT.
I am waiting with baited breath for your next update. The bribery points are now automatic, you can count on 'em.Author's response
lol, I love how you understand my characters. And thank you so much for the compliments! It makes me want to post what I already have written down, but I know its not enough. Just be prepared for a bit of suprises coming up!
PS. and I was hoping for hot in the bathroom scene...hehe hence the candles and the fire hazard.Falter
(#) LiveLoud 2007-02-22
More chapters like this one PLEASE!
You had all the right elements: romance, suspense... I'm hooked! Update again soon. You're quickly becoming my favorite ever. Have a HOT point.Author's response
Aw thank you, and your quickly becoming one of my favorite reviewers...is that a word? LOLFalter
(#) CoraLiz 2007-02-26
Very cliff-hanger chapter!
You don't see me saying 'Hey don't hang out with Pete because he gives me a bad druggie vibe' do you? That was a great chapter, but at this line I just had to laugh. I don't know why it stuck with me, but it did. lol
More Please!Author's response
I love making cliffhangers, I don't like it when people leave them when I'm reading their story lol yeah I had to put that line in there for certain reasons later on in the story :)
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